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Dark Poetry #3

Trick of Light

moshpit
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 143
cebu, philippines

0 posted 2002-09-30 11:51 PM

Trick of light,
What a sight.
A strip of dream
Burns so bright
And yet tonight--
Dimmed, it seems.

Beg for more,
What ever for?
There is no answer.
Bolt the door
Just like before,
Tiny yellow dancer.

Listen to me,
It has to be
The sadness I devour.
The misery
Is mystery--
Remainder of the hour.

Tonight we play
The words we say.
Tonight we sing and weep.
In beds, we pray.
In dreams, we stay.
Tonight we go to sleep.

D edgar Grey
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

1 posted 2002-10-01 11:38 PM

I'm not one with a very high rating on the intelligence scale, so I have yet to decipher many of the symbols/meanings behind these lines. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the painting that was created by this piece: It was almost, to me anyway, like a child remembering something in the past; yet at the same time being the words of a rather disturbed person. Intriguing and frightening....nice!

"Am assured,receptive,responsive women of substance. My sense of self comes not from other people but from myself? That can't be right." Bridget Jones

nolon
Junior Member

since 2002-09-25

Posts 20
Louisiana,Unitedstates

2 posted 2002-10-02 05:36 AM

Im not sure what was the meaning to this poem. I liked the way you ryhmed it, also it kept me in suspense and i could feel the fear.

moshpit
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 143
cebu, philippines

3 posted 2002-10-02 05:51 AM

you're both right, i guess.. loneliness can be disturbing sometimes..

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-10-02 03:17 PM

Phew, it was the "tiny yellow dancer" that got me!

Keep writing!

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

5 posted 2002-10-05 02:44 AM

a flickertrick
of misunderstood
and
ephemeral
love

a good one Mosh

Brian

moshpit
Member

since 1999-11-25

Posts 143
cebu, philippines

6 posted 2002-10-05 05:17 AM

thanks for putting it so beautifully, brian..

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