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fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

0 posted 2002-09-29 12:05 PM

Where Do You See Yourself in 25 Years?

Just ontop of the hill a man pushes his past
On the road to future prosperity
Hoping the dream will live beyond the darkness and last
The night to see the dawn.

The notes he carries are brittle now, barely giving
The truth this man once knew,
Telling of the world of dark and deceitful living
To all those who listen.

They curse the days recorded and scream the angry tale,
Giving the people fear,
Hammering out the hell-born life designed to fail,
The imperfect yellow page.

And so the hoary man pushes his past
Toward some distant peak
Where he can rest in peace, his dreams fulfilled at last,
And die some bizarre death.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

1 posted 2002-09-30 02:36 AM

You still prove yourself to be a master of dichotomy in words. This one I totally found pleasure in (meaning solely pleasure from an understanding, not from the reality of which you speak).
If I write my next poem, and start it out with the line "Jean is wizzing in Beethoven's stairwell again"... It makes me smile giddishly... for I saw the movie Basquiat, and watched "Jean Michel Basquiat" paint a portrait of Milo's daughter (Milo being played by Gary Oldman who also played Beethoven in "Immortal Beloved"), and then leave without announcement, only to have Milo go after him, and find him relieving himself in the "hallway" {which was a stairwell}. Taking this vignette to a poet-drinking-absynth revelation...The first line of my poem would speak volumes, and I would venture that there would be someone out there, if but one, that would understand, and laugh to the point of tears.
This piece predicates no laughter, but if no one else gets what I just said, you will. And to paraphrase it all, darn good poem!

Zall
Member

since 2002-08-25

Posts 214
London, England

2 posted 2002-09-30 03:45 AM

Great work Fractal

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-09-30 03:34 PM

f7,
Like climbing a ridge
to meet a mentor,
only to be pushed off.

Loved this.

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