A pauper's grave (a tanka)

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Dark Poetry #3

A pauper's grave (a tanka)

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-09-22 09:16 PM

Forest rainy mud.
Roots and earth tilled by the sky.
Sod and bone beneath.
Did he ever dream her hand
before he was skeleton?

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-22-2002 09:17 PM).]

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

1 posted 2002-09-22 09:29 PM

So...This is a Tanka. Not bein' funny here squirrel dude, just figgered out what a poem is. Now I find out they come in different flavors.

And this was a tasty little thing.

~Ed

WhiteRose
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since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

2 posted 2002-09-22 09:34 PM

Yes, surely, a tonka of a tanka. Enjoyed!

FuzzyFrazzledFraggle
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since 2002-09-20

Posts 155
Fraggle Rock

3 posted 2002-09-22 09:43 PM

I must admit I have no idea what a tanka is

SOMEONE please take away my license to write

But is very very interesting...

Consider yourself fuzzed

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-09-22 09:48 PM

Mikey!
Good one!
Tanka very much!

~Hugs~

~ Time has cast a spell on you
So you won't ever forget me ~

leafseranade
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since 2001-07-06

Posts 118
Wisconsin, USA

5 posted 2002-09-22 09:53 PM

Very nice dark tanka! This inspires me to try my hand at anothere tanka piece of my own. I wrote a series of them encompased into one poem that I was quite pleased with, so I'm thinking I'll try it again. Once again, nice work.

arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

6 posted 2002-09-23 05:24 AM

tanka the otter?
no that was tarka
anyway
I enjoyed it
a few bones were once the whole universe
arthur

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

7 posted 2002-09-23 04:00 PM

I'm glad you all enjoyed.

A tanka? Basically, 5-7-5-7-7.

Or a haiku that drools out the ending, in other words.

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