A winter habit of visiting

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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-08-26 04:33 PM

Months old.

A winter habit of visiting
Stormy winter night,
unlit candles on the table.
Evergreen totems
stand tall in darkened windows.

Shiver-kisses by the heater.
Her eyes as blue-green-gray
as I imagine the Atlantic
near Hampton, New Hampshire.

Purple-blue autumn roses
wilting in the heat.
Drooping, petals dropping
to sweep into our hands.

Burning both ends of us
in this sweating room.
Snow pelts the windows.
Icing trees to crowns.

Her gloves dampen quickly.
Our scarves hold on too tight.
The wind howls, evening train
sounds lost of its might.

Chilled dark chocolate squares
dropped into hot mugs.
Steam clouding vision,
leaving only breath.

A sweating blossom.
A wilting blossom.
A burning blossom.
Night-closing blossoms.

She has a winter habit of visiting,
and three seasons away at home.

Dragon Mistress
Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 289
Washington, USA.

1 posted 2002-08-26 05:24 PM

Hmm....Interesting. But good. Got me thinking. And I'm not highly known for my thinking abilities. I liked!

~*~I'm only a dreamer, with broken dreams, and only words to fall back on~*~

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

2 posted 2002-08-26 06:09 PM

squirrel dude,
Well, that's easy for you to say. Me? I struggle on.

Liked this (Way good) rich and dark oil painting.

~Ed

In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward".

~wranx~

Anvrill
Senior Member

since 2002-06-21

Posts 710
in the interzone now

3 posted 2002-08-27 12:17 PM

More'n six months old, so yr comment is a bit misleading.

'Cause it was before I had first planned to visit you in Cali in the first place, when I said I could only visit y' there in th' winter, 'cause I hate th' heat, r'member?

i'll be waiting for you
do exactly what you're told

jm

Zall
Member

since 2002-08-25

Posts 214
London, England

4 posted 2002-08-27 04:55 AM

a lot of great lines there, feelings well delivered

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-08-27 01:26 PM

Jeez, I just remembered! This poem is my old way of writing. What happens occasionally is I'll have a whole bunch of cool phrases nestling on my computer, but no poems to go with them. What I used to do is string those phrases together, to make a poem. The phrases for this one were ...

Stormy winter night,
Evergreen totems.
Shiver-kisses.
blue-green-gray
autumn roses
Burning both ends
evening train
dark chocolate squares
A sweating blossom.
A wilting blossom.
a winter habit of visiting

Not bad, for all that.

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