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Moved from a shack to a barn

0 posted 2002-08-11 10:15 PM

The Darkness
Visits me daily, now
Casting its’ foul pall
About me
And works its’ way
Into me

My lungs
With cloying ooze
A choking treacle

It grasps my heart
In bony fist
Squeezing reminders
That it is
Above all


The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.      


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somebody's dungeon
1 posted 2002-08-11 10:23 PM

Yes! That is exactly what it's like. A dark ink BLOT that darkens everything with it's deep black ooze. A perfect description. Yet we do, for some odd reason, find it irresistible. Good job Wranx.
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since 2002-06-25
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2 posted 2002-08-12 12:41 PM

I suggest
Quit Smoking!
wranx, beat that *stuff* away
don't let it stay
and settle familiar-like
It can get to be company
you problably already know
here's some back-up

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

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Once Upon, USA
3 posted 2002-08-12 02:35 AM

"With cloying ooze"
"In bony fist"

One could never come to know such vivid a darkness without also knowing it's opposite... We as humans only can understand by relation... We know bad because we've tasted good..We know hurt because we've experienced the absence of it...

A born-blind man doesn't truly comprehend what we mean by GREEN grass... as one born without a nose couldn't understand that although all are born with a**h*les, some are larger and thus carry a more undesirable

In other words, you've experienced all too well what you speak of, and convey it such that those blind or without olfactory abilities still understand...I.E. touche'!

since 2002-06-14
Posts 173
4 posted 2002-08-12 02:58 AM

Me totally thinks simply
That the lead singer of The Firm
Wouldn't have a shed of a clue
On this one.

The darkness here finally slaps away the images of fine young beauties dressed in bunny outfits wielding white guitars they know not how to play. This one was
"Simply Irresistable"

"So give life to your dreams, for there lies your survival, and cast your heart beyond those faded scenes, and I'll bring you through the storm

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5 posted 2002-08-12 11:12 AM

I can only hint at the darkness, as I've had my fair share of battles wranxy...haven't we all? I think that knowing something is "bad" for you makes you want it ALL the more (well, me anyhow)grins...

enjoyed your chilling travel through, as always sweet man...

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

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6 posted 2002-08-13 01:15 PM

You did it.  You somehow wrote about a vicegrip that's ... gentle...
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