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Anvrill
Senior Member

since 2002-06-21

Posts 710
in the interzone now

0 posted 2002-07-29 08:14 PM

A sudden hint of incense hits me,
and I have to stop and think.
The day stretches out so long
in a black and white room.
The noises and voices outside
all seem to stretch and fall away.

I remember his voice on the phone,
and wish it could have been
his breath in my ear.
Demonstrating what we're both good at,
not just talking it out.

I'm tired.
Too restless to sleep.
Another long night
waits for me.

It has struck me
that I never burned incense for him;
didn't touch fire
while he was here.
This will have to be remedied.
As many things
will have to be.

Something about him
drives out my innocence.
I couldn't be more eager
to see it leave.

Black curtains
are shuddering in the wind
and I close my eyes.

I'm tired,
but I won't sleep
until it's day again.
In the meantime,
I can stumble through life,
with waking dreams of him.

yet deign i embrace you with meek adoration?
your fragile humanity rised with contrition.

MR

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

1 posted 2002-07-29 08:20 PM

Got sort of a film noir quality here. I like this, but, ya know?...sleeep, goood!

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.

Bukowski

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

2 posted 2002-07-30 12:31 PM

*sigh* God I love y', babygrrl.

Mikhail

Said if I only could ...
-KB

PoetryIsLife

Senior Member

since 2001-10-27

Posts 1763
...in my boxers...

3 posted 2002-07-30 06:18 PM

Damn, I love it. A splendidly done piece on desire, distance, longing, love. Distance mixed with love is a dangerous potion. You word it out well. *nods* Greatly done piece - I love the feel/air of the piece, as well. Unique.

Sincerely,
Titus

"They say that a hero can save us. I'm not gonna stand here and wait..."

-Chad Kroger

Syneq
Junior Member

since 2002-07-28

Posts 40

4 posted 2002-07-30 09:24 PM

The love you hold for him show true through your words. Well done dear.

~Syneq

Disintegrated to materialize in reformed delight.

EveGnosis
Member

since 2002-02-21

Posts 300
New York, USA

5 posted 2002-07-31 02:05 AM

holy [edit]...
you totally outdid yourself on this one anvrill, and i totally felt and agreed with every letter of every word of every line of every stanza of the entire [edit] thing.
awesome!!!!!!!!! one of my very favorites because i am so gosh darn there i can't stand the thought of allowing myself to be.
you friggin' rule!!!!!!! so do your incense, voices, breath wishes, and respose! envy to the max here, and of all the poets i could quote from, i found the right one at 2am on a bad night. i toast!

ps - the new picture rocks!

i'll always need a friend, one i can defend.

[This message has been edited by Severn (07-31-2002 08:34 AM).]

Anvrill
Senior Member

since 2002-06-21

Posts 710
in the interzone now

6 posted 2002-07-31 09:40 AM

Wow, this li'l thing is getting quite the reception.

A storm was coming. I always start getting moody and halfway profound whenever a storm is coming; better than aching joints, huh?

Though now that the storm has come (and I'm sitting here in uncomfortably soggy clothing), my brain has probably gone dead.

But the moodiness hasn't left... Huh, is it some sort of a mean trick of nature? Grr.

Thank you all.

For putting up with my insane babbles of poems.

The loneliest words you'll ever know:
if only, if only it were so.

JS

WhileIWasGone
Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 486

7 posted 2002-07-31 10:10 AM

This is so beautiful...so is your picture.
Enjoyed much.

DeaDiAmore

Ceinwyn
Member Elite

since 2000-07-09

Posts 2175
VA

8 posted 2002-08-23 02:42 AM

yes better than aching joints!! yay for storms

I doubt this is going to sound highly orginial but I like the way you're mind was working with this one!! *trance like state now* loved it!!!

Kristen

Moon Dust

Member Elite

since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

9 posted 2002-08-23 10:12 AM

You write true and I loved this

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

brian sites
Senior Member

since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

10 posted 2002-08-23 11:31 AM

the smoke of longing
You have burnt incense
for him
and I bet he could smell it
Glad someone found this
nice
brian

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