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brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

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usa

0 posted 2002-07-27 01:59 AM

stucco ceiling novel

     the cat stretches

fan doesn't blur
              the residue air

a fly?
or a stray
hair

space can't hold my gaze

     slugs in the sun

the last breath
              an hour ago

mumbled?
long distance
phone

conch shell ears

     counting eyelashes

stirring tongue
             lips fall open

dust?
the taste of
silence

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

Moon Dust

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since 1999-06-11

Posts 2177
Skelmersdale, UK

1 posted 2002-07-27 08:53 AM

kwel

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

MomentzBefore
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since 2002-07-22

Posts 31

2 posted 2002-07-27 03:39 PM

Very intrestin.....:-)

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

3 posted 2002-07-28 01:32 AM

Palette balm smooth,
Tongue silvered silent.

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.

Bukowski

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

4 posted 2002-07-28 01:54 AM

thanks Moon
momentz -- thank you for the read
wranx -- don't waste that on this ditty

thanks dude

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2002-07-28 04:02 AM

Heh heh, nice work, BS.

No fair though -- this one's more surreal than my surreal-challenge one.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

devina
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

6 posted 2002-07-28 01:38 PM

Now I'm forced to shek out the challenge...see what ya gonnanddid???

loved the actuality of peace here...I'd *love* to taste some damnable silence right now...

~silent sighs~

enjoyed this...hmmm...silent brian??? eh?
yep, I like it...so I *dub* thee...grins...

take care you!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

7 posted 2002-07-29 12:44 PM

thanks b n' d
BS.
(is that bass n' drums
or bondage n' domination?)

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

8 posted 2002-07-29 03:33 AM

This painted vividly the sparseness of "alone"--I almost looked for a sleeping stranger next to me, to ask--"what is your name again?"

bit of a jolt, but I LIKE jolts...

you always surprise me with a different twist o thought.

brian sites
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since 2002-06-25

Posts 1475
usa

9 posted 2002-07-29 03:51 AM

thank you Mrs. Blaze
but it is I who should be saying that to you
your unique see
the stew
of serenity
BS.

I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles

wranx
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since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

10 posted 2002-07-29 07:27 PM

Yes, that's it! devina done devined it. Your writing (not just this) has actuality.
Damn, dat gal is sumpin'

~wranx

The shortest distance between two points...
is sometimes, intolerable.

Bukowski

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