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Dark Poetry #3

I'll Only Fall Once

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

0 posted 2002-12-26 10:28 AM

I ponder now what it is
what overly done lines
       perfect rhymes

will concrete once and for all
my down to earth fall

          all
            for
              the
                love
                   of

art.

So some statuesque bitch can read me
and draw an audience...

         I'll only fall once

then mortar and steel
in word reveal, futuristic
realistic, sharp edged images
   of life

perhaps you'll see the light
and in pale glow
you'll come to know

         I'll only  f
                      a
                        l
                          l
                            o
                              n
                                c
                                  e
                                    .

WhiteRose 12/25/02


"my reflection becomes me"

[This message has been edited by WhiteRose (12-26-2002 10:29 AM).]

neveah5
Member

since 2002-11-22

Posts 197
Ohio

1 posted 2002-12-28 05:11 PM

Interesting

D edgar Grey
Member

since 2002-08-21

Posts 174
Hell...(aka Wisconsin)

2 posted 2002-12-28 11:43 PM

The way you wrote this reminded me of Guillaume Apollinaire's work (by creating "images" with the words...i.e. "Fall once" written as actually falling). An example of his work would be "It's Raining." His work is rather weird, though...I haven't looked at it in awhile.
Anyway...sorry to ramble there...I liked this piece...it had strong emotions yet they were also rather subtle. Nice!

If homosexuality is a disease, let's all call in queer to work: "Hello. Can't work today, still queer." (If only...>; P)

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

3 posted 2002-12-29 04:21 AM

This is a well written piece with very good rhyming. It flows well. I'll certainly be adding it to my library.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2002-12-30 11:05 PM

Enjoyed...James

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