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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
As they all sit, they ponder and hopelessly wonder... Is it going to be excepted, trashed, compacted... Please speak and respond with niceties Don't clamp down on the reasons and realities I don't want to be hurt as the artist I think I am I want to hide in this constructed temple, skillful, and restfull I may not go on - would you consider me important? I will not finish until this jury complies Starting up again, will possible offend, one or two, But who, of all those eyes Don't want to know, I may just turn green Rip the cloths off my back and scream Don't hate me because I can write Don't say otherwise if it's not alright I will hurt, I will pout Until it sinks down into the screen, forgotten, forever, never to be seen. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Preach on... that's my attitude on it... offend if you must!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
Thanks, no offending... Glad you liked it, and can relate... An artist needs to hear it all... All in all, I used to like volleyball. Thanks |
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PoeticGoddessOfDepression Member
since 2002-07-02
Posts 439I am everywhere |
I really enjoyed this. I think anyone who can write can relate to this.  Good work, and keep it up. Sometimes tragedy is the best way... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
excellent poem. speaks loud volumes on the solid-state of many who attempt any art BS. I never aimed at reality; I aimed at truth. --Orson Welles |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
tanks BS !! hugs |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Well, then, I guess I should reply to this so it bobs like a cork back to th' surface of these Dark waters. She said burn ... together. |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
truth hurts |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Only a bi'. I like watchin' this poem crest th' surf, though.She said burn ... together. |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
Hugs Sweet sweet, sweetie no,no,no, shhh,shhh,shhh, it's ok sweetie You have a sweet heart... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Uh ... hugs are cool, but why are you shushing me? (p.s. when y' read this -- hi, lori!) She said burn ... together. |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
P.S., awright. Cool poem. I get pretty rabid about what I can and can't write myself, sometimes. But I like to stay in the realm of safeness now. Too much insanity goin' on back in high school."Silly bunny, there are no monsters in here." - Chrys, from Gloom Cookie |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Not only was the poem very cool ( I loved the imagery of the falling into obscurity by slowly getting lower on the threads until gone ), but I had to comment on how awesome I found a line in your response post.. "An artist needs to hear it all... All in all, I used to like volleyball." A peom in and of itself. Great! |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
Thanks Purity hey, anything you didn't like, or would do different? |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Absolutely not. I cannot consider myself to be a member of such a jury to comply... Just know that you always know why you wrote something, and why you felt compelled to share. If others do not appreciate, validate, or communicate applause, it lessens not the beauty of your writing, or your sharing. You've got my vote, and my thanks. [This message has been edited by Purity (07-14-2002 11:27 PM).] |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
Hey thanks, I put it up to get feedback, what ever form it takes. I like to hear what people may not like about it b/c it helps me (us) grow. Gives perspective ... as artists we can't stay hidden away in our own minds knowing that we like it, of course, you wrote it. Perspective.... www.miserymadebeautiful.com |
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Anvrill Senior Member
since 2002-06-21
Posts 710in the interzone now |
Actually, I find that I don't like my own stuff. It's just something that bursts outta me, and then there's a poem/story/song/novel sitting there in a lump of words at my feet. NOT a pretty picture. And then I hafta clean it up...  Anyway, I also find that I'm not nearly a good enough authority to comment on people's work. I can say when I like it and what I like, but if there's something that bothers me about a poem, I usually just won't respond, 'cause I don't know what to say. Not that that applies to every poem I don't respond to! Grr, must remove foot from mouth. I just read about three that're sitting on the main page every time I have time to read, which isn't remarkably often.written in blood before everything went black |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
I don't want to speak for you but when you said: "...if there's something that bothers me about a poem, I usually just won't respond, 'cause I don't know what to say" Sometimes you do, but don't know HOW to say it. Don't know what type of response you will get from the artist exposing their work to a forum. I think constructive criticism is showing RESPECT for your fellow artist, instead of just ignoring their work, or just saying "I like it," not to offend. One can usually fine something in a work that is good and bad, they like or dislike in their opinion, join them together in a critique to show honesty and be respectful. I only write poetry a little from time to time, but I do compose. I am majoring in Music composition, and I compose orchestral art music. The last thing I would ever want, especially in a conservatory amongst my peers and other composers, teachers, is them avoiding constructive criticism. But I know they will, actually, I'm counting on it... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ah, but one interesting feature of criticism is it's the choice of the reader whether to say anything or not. As it should be. Criticism isn't a right for the artist to invoke on any reader -- it's completely the reader's choice. That's why you have that little profile flag where you can ask for critiques or not. I know it's saved me headaches.She said burn ... together. |
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idrift2u Member
since 2002-07-09
Posts 60MD., USA |
really? |
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