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Krishankins
since 2002-06-23
Posts 972Texas 
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Sorrow seethes inside my soul Hented by a hopeless heart I long for love with lips that last As peril peels me apart [This message has been edited by Krishankins (07-01-2002 01:14 AM).] |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
You still do very well in your 4 line format. another good write. ~wranx "Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
 Yr a master at the 4-liner, Kris. And yr not bad at the other forms, either! Mike These smiling eyes are just a mirror for the sun. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Peril is another aquaintance of mine as well...and "seethes" was the perfect word. You are the one stanza tells-all master. Great! |
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deep_thought Junior Member
since 2002-06-28
Posts 24 |
There is something compelling about emotions crammed into as few words as possible. "When a thought has been expressed, more words are a waste of ink" |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Friends have shoulders too you know? Plant the seed... and watch it grow!! There is a hidden message there Kris...  enjoyed you yet again!!! Tanya Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
this is most interesting arthur |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
hopeless heart do not fear she waits for you in wax melting upon your tender touch where you drip within her tracks |
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