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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
In the distance I hear a scream A suffering soul Is calling to me I carry your sins Upon my back I pull you in When you stray off track I am your shadow I am your light I am your day Burning your night I walk beside you And watch from above As you live a life of hatred Destroying all that you love [This message has been edited by EarthenSoul (06-07-2002 05:17 PM).] |
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Encarta Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 101My homeland is not of the world |
Great poem. I can feel the emotions. Very nicely written. I look forward to reading your next |
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intheshadows New Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 7 |
Good poem. I really enjoyed it. |
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jenn08 Junior Member
since 2002-05-29
Posts 12Wa, USA |
carrying another's "burden" is always hard |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
watching others destroy themselves and being unable to help is so sad well written Arthur |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I empathize with this write. I've played both parts. ~wranx In reply to "which way do we go?", the answer was never "straight", but, "progressively forward". |
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D edgar Grey Member
since 2002-08-21
Posts 174Hell...(aka Wisconsin) |
Simple yet to the point! The best way to say what you want!! Yeah, I seem to carry everybody's burdens...know where you're coming from. Not a fun place, that's for sure! Thanks for the piece! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
ES, It's like two oily laces tied together, struggling to become untangled. Mike |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
Thankx all for the great comments & big thanx to Wranx for pulling this one up out the dungeon! bsquirrel, loved the poetic reply! |
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