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intheshadows New Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 7 |
My shattered life is lost in tears. I can't dream away unimagined fears. I'm falling apart underneath my skin. My heart is raw and bleeding within. You struck me when I was down. I was just a kid you could blame. I have carried all your shame. Come into my mind feel my pain. No childish dreams remain. I some how stayed sane through all the pain. The child inside me is gone, too afraid to carry on. I'm suffacating, but I am still alive. To afraid to live, to afraid to die. I close my eyes as my life goes by. And wonder why? |
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arthur Senior Member
since 2001-08-14
Posts 678england |
that is a good poem a precise expression of emotion thanks arthur |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
Excellent Poem!!! |
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jenn08 Junior Member
since 2002-05-29
Posts 12Wa, USA |
have you ever asked "them" why?? |
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EarthenSoul Member
since 2002-05-30
Posts 163WA, USA |
Very strong. Full of emotion and pain. Well written. |
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intheshadows New Member
since 2002-06-07
Posts 7 |
Yes, Jenn I have asked them why. The person's answer was because I was born. |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
Welcome to Dark Passions and might I add a very powerful first write. You had some awesome words and thoughts. Keep writing, Dark.... A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness. |
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MidnightSon Member
since 2002-05-15
Posts 312between the gutter & the stars |
the children inside die younger everyday. i know the place you live in. it doesn't ever get better. but you have to convince yourself it does. if you want to go on. "The soul is oftentimes a battlefield where reason and judgement wage war on passion and appetite." |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Welcome btw - such a sad first entry..it's remarkable how easily innocence and faith is lost..then we have to try to find it again... hugs glad to have you with us..  K |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I'm glad that you are attempting to excorsize this. Writing does help, and writing this well may help others. Well done. ~wranx "Writing is a perfectly natural thing to do....just remember to wash your hands afterward"....Heinlein. |
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blakloks Member
since 2002-06-01
Posts 60 |
wow...this is a really emotional poem...sorry you feel that way. i noe how u feel ~hugs~ |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
:( Great poem... She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (06-18-2002 01:50 AM).] |
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