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Dark Poetry #3

Another Lovesong, Posthumous

veil nulet
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since 2002-05-14

Posts 4

0 posted 2002-05-23 08:00 AM

I think I've worked it out- why you cried
your side of the clutch when I dropped you home.
We'd exhausted a night, in cars, on roads,
in rooms as bright and false as Christmas.
I suppose that's when you felt the divide
detaching you from this our jumbled past,
depriving all these things of shape, or weight,
and leaving words redundant props- you closed
the car door. I was dumb as any brute.

...So here we are again again my heart
once more just point-of-contact for your boot.

(May 2001)

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

1 posted 2002-05-23 02:02 PM

digging this - "in rooms as bright and false as Christmas" THAT is awesome. love the line, love the intent. look forward to more of these.

Christopher

[This message has been edited by Christopher (05-23-2002 02:04 PM).]

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2002-05-23 03:22 PM

I like the fact that Christopher picked up on the same line...it either means I'm looking at things his way...or he's looking at things my way...

A very good read. Thanks!

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (05-23-2002 03:22 PM).]

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2002-05-23 05:02 PM

And boy this is scary as I loved those lines as well, really awesome writing. I will be looking for more poetry from you, just excellent.

~* Tell someone in your family that you love them today *~

darkstar
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since 2000-08-09

Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA

4 posted 2002-05-23 08:35 PM

Wow. That was really awesome. Why does everyone like the same lines? I know I'm one of that little group who does. Anyways, I loved it.

*darkstar*

Severn
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since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

5 posted 2002-05-24 06:48 AM

~grins~

I picked up on that same line - gee, there's my personal philosophy on the 'holiday' season in 7 words...

I like this..softer than the first, but with so much impact...liking the brute line also..

so glad you posted this matey...

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