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coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

0 posted 2002-05-10 10:15 PM

flying down
a secondary highway
this river runs faster
bovine beasts
grazing oblivious
to my speed

Boy George
on the radio
I thought he
had faded
to the same
oblivion

raindrops fall
to enhance
the tires
humming

I am alone
in
the here and now

(c) William F. Stocks 2002

"Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." - T.S. Eliot

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2002-05-11 01:44 AM

You wrote of the feeling of being lonely extremely well. Enjoyed this.

We should spend less time worrying about when our life is going to end and more on when it's going to start!

Tiersdin
Member Elite

since 2000-11-17

Posts 2364
east coast

2 posted 2002-05-11 11:42 PM

well written...

~tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

3 posted 2002-05-13 12:25 PM

Thanks Sharon and Tiersden.
Sort of an experiment in style, or lack thereof.

coyote

"Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." - T.S. Eliot

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

4 posted 2002-05-13 05:36 PM

Your isolation sparked a great li'l poem.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

5 posted 2002-05-13 07:21 PM

Thanks, b.
On the Road Again.
Down a Lost Highway.

coyote

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

6 posted 2002-05-13 10:48 PM

This is cool matey...

my only suggestion would be to lose this line:

to the same
oblivion

I think that stanza reads better just ending at 'faded'

good work...

K

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

7 posted 2002-05-13 11:42 PM

Thanks, Kamla.
Too late to edit here though.

coyote

"Genuine poetry can communicate before it is understood." - T.S. Eliot

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

8 posted 2002-05-15 10:46 PM

Wow, great write here. I felt like I was right there watching it on a movie screen or something. Well done.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

9 posted 2002-05-15 11:15 PM

Thanks, Lone Wolf.
I appreciate your reading.
Glad you liked it.

coyote

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

10 posted 2002-05-16 08:22 PM

Whoa! Another rather good "capturing the moment" poem. I think this one will go to my library for sure.

"If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh"

-- Magus

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

11 posted 2002-05-16 10:12 PM

Thanks, Frac.
Glad ya stopped back by.
Moments, are really all we have.

coyote

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