Dark Poetry #3 |
Slicing Into Me |
Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
As I listen to your words, sometimes the lack-there-of, I take them in... tasting them, dissecting them, swallowing them and digesting them, I find that it is sadness that slices into me. As I see what you have done, seeing also all that you haven't done and seeing all that you have been, I find that it is betrayal that slices into me. When I look into your eyes, seeing all the truth and uncovering all the lies seeing what I see, I find that it is hate that slices into me. When I look into my own eyes and find the blackness that shadows my past and covers all that I could be, I find that it is anger that slices into me. When I look at all that surrounds me at the world and how truly messed up it all really is, I find that it is hopelessness that slices into me. And as I look at the people all around me at who and what they are all the same things that I will never be, I find that it is jealousy that slices into me. Now, as I stop and take the time to experience all the things I am feeling inside, I find that it is hurt that slices into me. "No man is EVER worth my tears, and the only one who is will never make me cry" |
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NapalmsConstantlyConfused
since 2001-05-15
Posts 529 |
this is true, hurt can feel like a knife... sometimes a hurt is so sharp that we don't realize how deep it went until later, when something reminds us. this is very good, and i look forward to reading more of your work. |
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Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
And as I read your words, hope, jealousy, anger, hopelessness, hurt, betrayal, sadness...all the strongest negatives that have sliced into you, I realize the positiveness of strength and endurance that encompasses the inner you. The immunity to these pangs of life can potentially make it more grand when you finally get to that space of happiness that everyone deserves to finally imbibe, if you don't callous your heart from all those negative words. An excellent work with powerful feelings. Good luck to you, and I hope you get to your "space"!~! |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
thank you both for your replies. I haven't posted in a LONG time and I'm happy to see that people here are still as friendly. Thank you much!!!! "No man is EVER worth my tears, and the only one who is will never make me cry" |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Nice poem. I like your repeating theme of what it is that slices into you. With regards to your stanza about people being all that you won't ever be, you might like to check out Shakespeare's sonnet with the first line "When in disgrace with fortune and men's eyes". Can't remember which sonnet that is. Dunnno, u might see that others have felt that kind of jealousy before. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus [This message has been edited by fractal007 (04-13-2002 02:46 AM).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Not meaning for any bad cliches or anything but I find your words slicing into me..I know all those feelings all too well and your poem painted his face in my mind again...and now I remember why it never did work out between us..I did highly enjoy this.. Kristen |
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