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Rebelious Member
since 2001-05-27
Posts 57Kansas, USA |
Wrote this one on the fly... just to see if i have any juice left in my head. Today i was asked a painfull question.. "How does true love feel?" At first i hesitated, and then started my lonely ideel (ideal) When you think of this person, when you know you'll see them soon. Your stomache feels all bubbly, and you glow as bright as the moon. When you are away from them, even for just awhile. You worried sick, and can't force a smile. You praise them on high, you never let them down. You make them very happy, and your heart breaks when they frown. And fineally when it all ends, Your world, your life.. is nothing more, than a blood droplet from a knife. |
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Lisa_bebe15 Member
since 2001-11-15
Posts 151Florida |
wow..this is really good...I can't write anything like that..but I can so relate to ur poem..I was in a long distance relationship and I never saw him *sighs* we broke it off Monday night..But yea..I felt the same way as ur poem says..good write! *Lisa Ann* "Water Over Matter" |
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Dark Kisses Member
since 2001-06-24
Posts 364Flat lands of Kansas |
True love is different for each person. But I believe you captured some good meanings here. Great Thoughts, Dark A friend, like a candle, is most needed in the darkness. |
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Encarta Member
since 2002-02-14
Posts 101My homeland is not of the world |
All so vary true. Great poem  I look forward to reading more from you |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Another interesting read. You seem to like violent imagery, as indicated by your rather abrupt ending. I like you use of the moon as a comparison to the brightness of your face. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" |
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