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Breaking Point
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Breaking Point |
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forever_unforgiven2 New Member
since 2001-01-05
Posts 4 |
Breaking Point I fight reality Welcome insanity Nothing seems to go away Nothing seems to ever stay I'm bleeding just to kill the pain This mirror lies You shall reign You couln't see into my eyes I glued myself to this disguise The water's pouring Cascade my numb body All I want is truth I don't want to know But now its time to go I grip the blade With anger's fist Can't handle this mortality And all its sists Can't go back or foward Or stay right here I'm falling inlove with death The devil's anthem is all I hear My soul-less mind and heart Can't care for heaven's pleasures I'm sorry I can't be another one of his stolen treasures I'm knowing that I won't Know that I can't Succeed the scornful misery And chivelry That I bring upon this world And I hope to hell That I should die Because all I wanted Was a single breath From your vaguely sypathetic soul That couldn't condole What measures can extent From hours spent Alone in darkness With no place to call home And I'm falling so far So deep In blood And soul's that lost their way They flood My carcased body In this boat That leads me to my destiny afloat My hell is watching you raise another like me And blame them for your misery And you think enjoyment comes to me As I die in these wastelands of ash and chronic insensitivity Well you're wrong You can't endure this pain That we as a whole From you must gain To conquer hate And the fact that I could never hate you as much as you hate me Medusa, Look into my eyes I'll turn you to stone Because I'm tired of being your damn stepping stone But it doesn't matter It never will I could suffocate before you Still remain still So I will Just to prove that point And to end what you call the Breaking point I'll break myself And to all of you Who knew my every organ's hole Who opened up your coat And let me crawl inside you whole Remember blue skies Always Turn grey Don't let my mortal extinction make you pay Life is never what it seems In every good deed there is a sin And means To hold us back from what we need I just couln't be that strong To undo your wrong I know what I'm doing I know where I'm going There are worse things that death Better things than life Never say what you don't mean Never deny what you can see Because I never made it to that place That place so far from here I'd close my eyes and try to dissapear I don't have to cut For me to bleed It just stops the pain The pain of having to be |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Totally Intense! WoW! Feeling this one. Heavy. Powerful write. Take care. *Peace. |
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mystic requiem Member
since 2001-01-26
Posts 144 |
I've read so much of the usual knife thingie and cutting oneself, seems passe. But your approach, with so much depth to it, is fabulous. Kept me reading. Applause! *thanx*   mYsTiC |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Hang in there, keep writing and check out some of the other things in "Dark". |
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howpeculiar Member
since 2000-12-12
Posts 56 |
Now THIS is the skeleton of poetry: rich images slid in neatly between simplistic, biting phrases. So many times you see people trying to drive out their message with forced images, or linguistic warps, thinking they need words to prove themselves. You have brought out a voice instead of noise built on a perfectly piled (sterile) vocabulary. ~ To conquer hate And the fact that I could never hate you as much as you hate me ~ …this is a perfect example: plain, minimal, and it succeeds. Granted, to have something like this published, you would have to go through the linguistic warp… and that’s okay. A piece of poetry should never be finished, but continually reworked, made over like bread… THANK YOU for adding voice to my night, for making me feel spoken to, though the narrator was self-addressing. This is a fine, fine piece. My congratulations. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
yes VERY intense here! The *Dark* can be what you make of it! Dont give up and keep searching.  Good write here, Mags No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
wow this seemed long, but it was also very good, i enjoyed it |
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