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As a Blackness Blooms
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As a Blackness Blooms |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597
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As a Blackness Blooms The crows arrive some circle some dive they know it’s nearly five gathering in a tree top live We’ve winter snow and the crows know about a black and white flow as they gather now for the show It’s no surprise they are so wise together as a flock comprise a phenomenon of some great size So silently they arrive to tree and we few who do not see seem to think we are still free But change is come today for some that what they have become they are to be delivered from Here with a friend now at the end they will help us off to send along the route we all will wend Now black and white flow again in flight as the crows will in their fright rise and disappear into the night And darkness looms as a blackness blooms that covers all new tombs outside these empty glassed in rooms 1/14-26/01 |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Krawdad, vivid and haunting images, I loved it! write on Keth. Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
Very S-P-O-O-K-Y!  Well written and well expressed also. Loved it, Mags Psssstttt.... thanx for the replys to my poems, it is all appreciated!  No person is worth your tears, and the only one that is ...... will never make you cry |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Kethry, Thanks for stopping by. You like being haunted? hhhmmmm. . . Dark Kisses, Spooky? Maybe I should have kept it for Halloween? We'll resurrect it in October. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Haunting imagery, very well expressed with perfect rhyme Take care, Melissa The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
------------------------------------- But change is come today for some that what they have become they are to be delivered from Here with a friend now at the end they will help us off to send along the route we all will wend ------------------------------------- And darkness looms as a blackness blooms that covers all new tombs outside these empty glassed in rooms ------------------------------------- yes..change is inevitable..it will come..and they will go..and i've learned that we must keep breathing, until our moment of transition comes..and it will come....then someone else will play our role... the blackness blooming, that covers new tombs...this stanza gives me chills, as its a scene that never truly goes away...it stays with us..its a cold, cold scene--even in the heat of summer... very good write my friend.. hugs, g< !signature--> "i was thinkin' if you were lonely maybe we could leave here and no one would know at least not to the point where we would think so..." [This message has been edited by dgvarner (edited 01-28-2001).] |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Melissa, Thanks for stopping by. The rhyme was key to getting this written. This started out as something quite different than what it ended up to be. The perfect rhyme gave me the structure to pull the pieces together. g, Thanks for the read. Lots of symbolism here, almost too heavy, somewhat offset by the "incessant" rhyme. It was indeed meant to convey a chill or two. Hugs returned, e |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
e.. sometimes..even the poet doesnt realize what he's written..until he notices his hearts burden has, at some point, lessened..a little... hugs, g |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
E/K? I enjoyed this...could "see" it all, like stop motion frames in a movie...beautifully done, m'friend! |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
This is good. I like the image. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
K/S, Nice to hear from ya'. Did you see it all? All the blacks, all the whites? Mirror Man, Glad you liked it. Thanks for the read. |
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Bee Junior Member
since 2000-11-23
Posts 23Ireland |
A very powerful poem, Krawdad! So well written and great symbolism within. Do we really need to be afraid of the dark? It is interesting to see, how various cultures deal so differently with death. Since I live in Ireland, my attitude towards this matter has changed a lot: it is part of everyday life, accepted like birth, included in the conscions as renewal, closing the circle of life with an often very religious attitude. Thanks for sharing your thoughts, Bee. (Come big black bird and carry me to the other side, where there is no judgement, pain or fear.) |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Bee, Thank you for your comments. The writing of this poem "transmitted" a fair amount of power. I wasn't suggesting a fear of the dark tho, more the mythical, and real, power of it. Languages have their limits. Kraw' (check your e-mail for more) |
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