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Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

0 posted 2002-01-18 01:51 AM

A smile is stolen,
And a heart is broken,

This creature submits to no one,
Whether it comes from the past,
Or the present or the future,
It provides the same lecture,

When a want is not heeded,
It cunningly proceeds,
A stable way it creeps,
With each soul it rips,

For this sadness becomes mine,
That is why I write this rhymes.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

mauddib
Member

since 2002-01-12

Posts 119
melbourne australia

1 posted 2002-01-18 04:21 AM

Monsters from the Id, I quite aggree with you
a very good read

Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

2 posted 2002-01-18 10:23 AM

Very well expressed! I think we all know this monster at one time or another.

Well written,
Mags

Don't cry because it's over: smile because it happened.

Secret Whisper
Member

since 2001-01-25

Posts 298
Through the Looking Glass

3 posted 2002-01-20 10:46 PM

wonderful style of writing. there is something about it that really communicates well and is enjoyable to read. The message is true too.

Quod me nutrit me destruit.
("What nourishes me also destroys me." - latin)

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

4 posted 2002-01-20 11:11 PM

Thanks for the good response Secert. Take care. I enjoy the art of writing poems. I was planning to stop writing them. But writing is something that is meant to be.

Thanks again.

Ronil (One becomes god only when they have fully understood the role of being a human being.)

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

5 posted 2002-01-21 12:47 PM

This was very good and very sad, but I enjoyed it very much

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

6 posted 2002-01-22 07:10 PM

well u described me very well. my creature is more like a demon but my girl is helping me conquer him. another wonderful piece keep it up.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

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