Dark Poetry #3 |
Dare I To Err |
Purity Senior Member
since 2001-11-20
Posts 526Once Upon, USA |
Be Patient, For if it's to be it shall. The words still clamouring the Dings of both regret and hope. So long now, Patience and waiting and praying And belief and will have been the Affections and intimacies for me... Not you. Yet, when second best shines with The positions deemed solely mine, Choices abound, and ultimatums beg. But then, there you are, Not out of sight or mind or heart, Saying no one takes the time To come to know, anymore, those whom Their hearts wish with to intertwine. Giving more of yourself and time And everything since decisions came To attempt to let you go, now you Opt to make appearances, As if you think possibility. Lest I seem insecure, I formulate my stance..."Heads I win; Tales someone loses." Will you be there? Is he who so wants Now to place me as you, he as me, Actually in first place due solely To my own error in judgement? Such a technicality, Yet dare I to err again? For you? For him? For myself? Which err do I dare would be best? |
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Joe Houck Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 324california |
wow......powerful stuff.....liked this poem alot joe |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hmm... which one would be best i wonder...nice poem...enjoyed it lots! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. |
You have the right to make mistakes with out explaining your actions.You have the right to also enjoy it when you succeed. paladin |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
this is an awesome right, sometimes are minds play tricks on are true feelings which one or thing can make us take a look into ones true self. Very deep and meaningful poem good job. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Oh, wow. What a piece my friend! Deep, deep, deep. And troubling. What questions, what probing. A fantastic piece here. Wow. *walks away mumbling to himself* Sincerely, Titus Smile, Jesus loves you. :) |
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Ginners Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 339Mullica Hill, New Jersey |
Wow, this was very good, I really liked and enjoyed it, a lot. "I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"-NIN |
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Secret Whisper Member
since 2001-01-25
Posts 298Through the Looking Glass |
Loved this piece! Wonderful writing style. Though I normally loath reading 'relationship' pieces, you pulled this one off flawlessly. Quod me nutrit me destruit. |
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