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Dark Poetry #3

I want my river back

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

0 posted 2001-12-27 07:06 PM

I remember the turbulent peace
In the old river
And those nice danger fishes
Forcing me to run
Against the flow
I was so happy there
Where ocean was the goal
And I was not afraid

Now I find myself
In this quiet horrible lake
Waiting
Sun decides to dry it all

I want my river back

Fading Away

Member Elite

since 2001-03-14

Posts 3131
Lynchburg, Virginia

1 posted 2001-12-29 12:38 PM

Very nice imagery in this piece. The message is heartwrenching, though. *hugs* I hope you find your way back.

--Marie

"It's been a long December, and there's reason to believe that maybe this year will be better than the last." (Counting Crows)

DawnG

Senior Member

since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

2 posted 2001-12-29 01:22 PM

This is a very sad piece, but you expressed your message very well. Great poem.

Dawn

Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

3 posted 2001-12-29 10:07 PM

Awwww the peace we all knew at one time. Nicely written

Mags

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

4 posted 2001-12-30 09:47 AM

Thank you Fading Away, DawnG and Dark Kisses.

Each reply works like a drop of rain in the lake

Thank you.

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