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Alysia182 Junior Member
since 2001-06-22
Posts 19CT |
It's been a while since I have posted anything, but here it goes... I sit here on my floor, Looking into my own eyes, Watching crystal tears streak my face, Drip Drip Drip I look at a picture of two, Locker 410 in the background, Ripped in half because of one's decison, Drip Drip Drip I lay upon my bed, Stairing at an orange hat, Remembering memories; now gone Drip Drip Drip I remember what a good feeling, It is so be loved. Now I have no one, Drip Drip Drip I watch the crystal tears, Fall from my face, With no one to dry them, Drip Drip Drip Some day, you will ache like I ache! ~Hole [This message has been edited by Alysia182 (edited 11-19-2001).] |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well done, Lizzy...good progression and flow. Couple minor errors --- "stairing" should be "staring" and "It is so ("to" not "so") be loved, both typos. Only mention it because you seem to want to know. And your poems do not suck - You have much to to be happy with in them - especially, as I said before, in the way you shed new light on a worn subject. jwesley |
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