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Dark Poetry #3

in a last breath

carolinadreams
Member

since 2000-07-20

Posts 142

0 posted 2001-11-16 03:10 AM

cause hearing anyways is not in town

give me a hill and forget about time
when it hurt so bad
i'm amazed i'm alive
you want it short and sweet
believe what you eant to believe

wanna hear about life
just close your ears tonight
don't want you ta hear the screams
must've been a bad dream

care to chance the light
maybe enjoy the fright
well now that changes everything
except the mirror
you scare you
now that's amazing

what if you were blind
and hadn't seen that story time after time
maybe you were too involved
until you evolved

what if you still were deaf
could you cope with death

J.L. Koehler

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Temptress

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JT
Member

since 2001-09-28

Posts 69
Arkansas, USA

1 posted 2001-11-16 11:33 PM

Very good. Enjoyed it.

JT

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

2 posted 2001-11-19 10:09 PM

powerfully done. . . just goes to show that there's always one more breath. . .

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Purity
Senior Member

since 2001-11-20

Posts 526
Once Upon, USA

3 posted 2001-11-20 01:13 AM

The baby steps of one coming to know his/her own inability to accept the recurring facades of those whom he/she would hope would be the last one(s) to be such. A very harsh topic of reality conveyed truthfully, and yet with the incredible poetic detail I would expect from such a reknowned writer.

Jeremiah Johnson
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 1223
Brooksville, Fl, U.S

4 posted 2001-11-21 12:47 PM

This is a great poem my friend. i hope to read more of your work. also this kind of reminds me of a song in a way well to me anyway.

I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson-

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