Dark Poetry #3 |
Rose Petals & Thorns! |
qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
ROSE PETALS & THORNS! Your love is like a rose, it's open then it's closed. Double-sided, intertwining, slowly dieing & then reviving. When I think it's dead, it shows some life again. Roots are sprouting, no more pouting. Satin petals caress my skin. Must be gentle, delicate petal, falling apart in my hand. I've lost it once again! A thorn is stuck, blood is drawn, I have no luck, no green thumb. Sprinkle some droplets, to show that I care, it looks pretty lifeless, but the seed is still there. I'll come back tomorrow, my little flower, & bring you back, with all my power! LOVE ELMO [This message has been edited by qtpieelmo (edited 10-30-2001).] |
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JT Member
since 2001-09-28
Posts 69Arkansas, USA |
I thought this was really good. It reminded me of an old Neil Young song. "Love is a rose but you better not pick it. It only grows when it's on the vine." You did a good job. Keep it up. JT |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Thanx JT, I appreciate your taking the time to reply! LOVE ELMO |
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Keith Morgan Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 114Md |
Very creative writing. Nicely expressed. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Thanx Keith LOVE ELMO |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Beautifully written!!! BRAVO!!!!!!! ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd.. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Thank you much! Can you see the rose shape it made?--lol-- LOVE ELMO |
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Dark Poet Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 99North Carolina, USA |
This had a way of putting the image of blood of a rose. One giving life to the other. As to if that is what was meant or not I still thought the poem was good. We are born into this world alone, and we will die alone. It is what we do between those times that matters. This is where we leave our mark. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Yea I guess you could say that, Thanx for the reply! LOVE ELMO |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
this is a great poem i rather enjoy it very much and i think i'll print it out. also the way you switched the colors is cool I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Thank you very much Jeremiah!!--Yea it was just weird how I typed it out one day & I noticed it kinda looked like a rose!--lol! Merry X-mas/Happy Holidays Everyone!! ELMO [This message has been edited by qtpieelmo (12-25-2001 08:54 AM).] |
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