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Dark Poetry #3

alone once more

silent whispers
Junior Member

since 2001-07-07

Posts 40
Alaska

0 posted 2001-10-17 05:09 AM

alone once more
silent, dark, sweet
lace edged perhaps
but its paper lace
wet with night mist,
cobweb fog drifting
across painted fingertips-
smog green with a trace
of lilac fragrence
just enough to deflect
the drizzel inside
onto the window pane

Inside the light you lose its edges until pushed

Alan
Senior Member

since 2000-09-12

Posts 1499
right next door

1 posted 2001-10-17 10:24 PM

i like this. I made the mistake of reading one line at a time but when you go with the flow ...you did good...

Immortal Beloved
Junior Member

since 2001-10-17

Posts 42
the carpathians

2 posted 2001-10-18 01:23 PM

"lace edged perhaps
but its paper lace
wet with night mist,
cobweb fog drifting
across painted fingertips-
smog green with a trace
of lilac fragrence"

What lovely descriptions these are,they have a certain nostalgia to them,very unique,good work!!

ammelid

Fere libenter homines id quod volunt credunt~Julius Caesar

xShUgArHiGhx

Member Elite

since 2000-09-26

Posts 3150
tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs

3 posted 2001-10-18 01:48 PM

how u described things the way u did was perfect...wonderful

ShE'S nOt ThE kInDa GiRL..WhO lIkeS tO tElL tHe WorLd AbOuT tHe Way She FEEL'S aBouT hErSelf...ShE tAkEs a LiTtLe TiMe In MakIn uP hEr MiNd..

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