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The Stillness of A Lost One
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The Stillness of A Lost One |
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CherryBlossom Junior Member
since 2001-10-13
Posts 14Communicate! |
Can I lie beside you, my dear? And rest my head upon your chest? I know you may not feel my touch, Or hear my voice, Not even say a word. But let me feel For one last time And remember what it was To hold you in my arms... What a shock to feel Your skin so still and cold. Alas... Let me imagine that I hear Your singing soul Although the music From your heart Has ceased to share it's tunes... That lovely minstrel Never again to be heard... ________________ Bah. Unfinished poem. O.o I know it's horrible... Reality is a doctrine. |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
Actually, it is not terrible, just the opposite...the idea behind it is a grand one and made me think with my fist cup of coffee this morning, and that is always a good thing!! Finish adding what you want a re-post please, I would love to read the completed version... Until...ali "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001 |
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Baroni Member
since 2001-10-14
Posts 94Ontario, Canada |
I agree with ali... not horrible at all. I think the pain of loss comes across clearly.... Well done. |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
A poem ends when the writer says it does--this could be the end or you can come change it at anytime--the choice is yours--none the less it's still great & heartfelt  LOVE ELMO |
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cherish Senior Member
since 2001-03-25
Posts 1639swimming in fairy floss........... |
 not horrible at all- i can see that this poem has a lot of potential blossom  . im looking forward to the finished version of this- so HURRY!!  see the glass crack like a flower opening |
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