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Postcard from Jail
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Postcard from Jail |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding 
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Just waiting for the house to sell To escape this God forsaken hell What you call marriage I call jail Love gone bitter, life gone stale Decaying walls around my mind Hide the rotting carcass of love behind A wedding that never should have been Was based on illusion and make believe I thought you the one, but oh how wrong How soon I discovered we didn’t belong The trivial things that would make you uptight Three days of silence, and then a big fight You stood by and watched as my happiness faded Replaced by disdain and outlook so jaded Til finally I said that I wanted no more You pled for mercy, said don’t shut the door But it was too late, and I told you so You were so helpless – you watched my heart go You looked up and asked me if I hate you now Much worse than that-I feel nothing somehow Now live as room-mates and lead separate lives You’ll never again hear me say I’m your wife My love once it’s gone can’t be brought back again It just left the station, it caught the last train Next chapter of life now I see round the bend This heart will be happy and this soul will mend When the house is sold If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! so much said, so familiar. Well done. "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Very heartfelt write. Full of much emotion. Nice job. All writing comes |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Thank you both for reading. It was one of those lousy days when I wrote it. In retrospect, I probably shouldn't have posted it. Maybe a little too much information. Oh well. Thank you both for your comments. EagleOne, wish it didn't sound familiar for you, I hope all ended up well in the end. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
What do they say? A change is as good as a holiday?? You are right, I have a very dear friend who went through what you are going through, and now she has a lovely new apartment and she is free and ever so happy!! Hope the house sells quick for you!!!!!! Isis *The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~ |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Hmmm...I know a real good REALTOR that could sell that house for you.  Seriously, this is a wonderfully written, emotion-provoking piece. What is a house when it stops being a home and becomes an empty shell? Once again, this was simply terrific. Don't care what people say |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Tracey, such a sad story. I know it will work out in the end. By the sound of that you deserve some happiness. Dee |
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JT Member
since 2001-09-28
Posts 69Arkansas, USA |
Wow. Raw emotion can really be strong in poetry form. Sometimes we go through hell and end up writing some the best stuff. I guess if life was always wonderful for everyone there wouldn't be great poetry. JT |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Isis-thanks, I hope the house sells quick too. I can almost taste my freedom and looking forward greatly too it Sonjes-send that realtor over here!!!  . You're absolutely right about a house being an empty shell when it's not a homeDee-thanks so much for the kind thoughts today JT-you're right about the best poetry coming out of the worst times. Thanks for reading, and welcome to passions And to all, just to let you know, I'm in a much better state of mind now, than when I wrote that piece. Thanks all of you for stopping by and leaving your thoughts If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Jeen Member
since 2000-06-07
Posts 91 |
Wow..Written from the heart...it seems to have touched many who have been there (myself included) Jeen [This message has been edited by Jeen (edited 10-12-2001).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
You looked up and asked me if I hate you now Much worse than that-I feel nothing somehow Ya know, I read this when you first posted. I didn't respond then because my response would have been too intense. But tonight...I've had more than my share of Rum and Coke. Tonight, I will respond simply, I understand every word of this. |
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alibaster Member
since 2001-07-07
Posts 299In my own private hell...(PA). |
When nothing is left and all the hurt has been said Nothing remain but the empty rooms filled with memories in our heads... I too understand every single word that you have written and commend you on putting it together so very well!! Until...ali "There is an alter ego which dwells within every soul." (C)alibaster 1999-2001 |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Tracey, I understand this jail. It's one I escaped from not so long ago. Two years, and I can still feel the unraveling, though it had to be, and never should have been. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Jeen, thank you. It seems many of us have been where I am now. Duncan, I know exactly what you mean when you say you couldn't reply at first because it would have been too intense. I've done that myself when a poem has really touched my core. It's unfortunate for so many of us to understand these thoughts. Enjoy the rum and coke. I'm back to Ice Wine tonight Ali, thank you and I'm sorry that you too can understand these feelings Midnitesun, you have been where I am now and I'm glad for you that you escaped. I'm looking forward to my new life. I know I will be 1000 times happier. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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LadyPeach1 Member
since 2001-06-04
Posts 282 |
WOW! That was an amazing write. Full of anger, pain, and frustration. that was awesome! I know someone who is going through something similar to this. I hope your house sells! You deserve to be treated better. Take care. GOOD JOB! LadyPeach1 |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Excellent!!! ~Tier |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Trace It's been a long time in coming, but here it is...your GET OUT OF JAIL FREE card! (Well, ok...it cost a little, deal with it, darlin!) Now go dance on the furniture and enjoy your life. It's finally yours, again. Dunc |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Tracey, Woooohoooo! Everybody thinks of changing humanity and nobody thinks of changing himself. Leo Tolstoy |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
Amazing. Don't let your mind wander, it's much to small to be out by itself. |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Tracey, I wish you all the happiness in the world After what you had to feel to write this pain.. you definately deserve it.Tara "My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
What a write! There is nothing worse than having been asked how you feel about someone and hate doesn't even come up, just "empty", boy do I know this one. Let's hope that house goes fast, as I feel for you Tracey, I really do. The pursuit of truth and beauty is a sphere of activity in which we are permitted to remain children all our lives. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi lady, are you free soon? I hope so. You said a lot here, I have been in that space twice, its very miserable and lonely, I know. Luv ya Sandra |
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