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Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

0 posted 2001-01-22 12:16 PM

The sky and the ground bleed,
into one another.
The sun a single washed out bead
suspended over and inside nothing.

One whole canvas of dead water,
creeps and slithers.
Landscapes where trees seem to totter
and heave with reflections leading nowhere.

The earth wears a grey veil,
of a widow.
Sky is dense grey-pale
with seas of rolling cloud entities.

Sometimes i think i came from the clouds,
on a winter's day.
Swathed in already dyed burial shrouds
moonbeam on my cheek,nothing on my feet.

Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

1 posted 2001-01-22 01:03 AM

Faeryie,
Very interesting what you see. I've been in places like this. I like the voice you have given to it.
Kraw'

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

2 posted 2001-01-22 12:53 PM

very cool swampy...imagery--awsome!!

hugs, g

"i was thinkin'
if you were lonely
maybe we could leave here
and no one would know
at least not to the point where we would think so..."

ma miller
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 806

3 posted 2001-01-22 01:46 PM

Swamp¤Faeryie ... this piece speaks of the human unsurity we all experience at some point in our lives ... not black, but certainly grey ... nice work.

dragonpoe
Senior Member

since 2000-11-12

Posts 608
Palm Bay, Florida

4 posted 2001-01-22 04:12 PM

Enjoyed this very much.

With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free..
dragonpoe

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

5 posted 2001-01-22 10:09 PM

Powerful dark imagery. Well penned with such sorrow. ~Hugs~

Take care,
Melissa

The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

6 posted 2001-01-23 03:20 PM

thank you all =] i'm sick of this gray-ness,winter is my favorite and my least favorite. I always wait all year for winter,but after all that snow melts and all you have left is mud and dirty patches,well,YUCK!!!!!!!!!
Thanks =]
swamp faeryie

Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

laryalee
Member

since 2000-06-19

Posts 352
Alberta, Canada

7 posted 2001-02-03 09:33 PM

Such a great atmospheric portrayal -
a painting in grey - sadness at the end, but the 'moonbeam on my cheek' is so delicious ...
The poem's beauty overcomes its sorrow.
Lary

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

8 posted 2001-02-04 12:29 PM

S F - nice write here...

I'm currently visiting America - left my beautiful summer behind lol - and winter is a strange thing here...it's very dry in the air - I haven't seen snow yet but I want to no matter the wet, grey slushy aftermath...heh.

K

Swamp¤Faeryie
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 393
fairyland....of course;)

9 posted 2001-02-05 01:34 PM

Thanks laryalee and severn i hope you get to see it snow!! It's really wonderful,at first anyhow =]Where i live i think spring may just about be here and it's prob'ly done snowing,but i hope it snows once more for you where ever you are!! thanks!!

swamp

Do i contradict myself?Very well i contradict myself.I contain multitudes.~walt whitman

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