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Dark Poetry #3

Hatred Sun

Dark Poet
Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 99
North Carolina, USA

0 posted 2001-08-27 05:52 PM

Hatred Sun
Copyright 2001
Written by James Edward Shields

My head is swimming
And I don't know where to go
Time ticks by
I just can't let go
Trying to strive
For a better destiny
Losing my mind
In the sun I can't see
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Dark Kisses
Member

since 2001-06-24

Posts 364
Flat lands of Kansas

1 posted 2001-08-30 11:59 AM

Very good flow here and well written. Odd how sometimes it's difficult to let go eh?

Mags

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Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

2 posted 2001-08-30 02:15 PM

Wow - well expressed and to the point, the last two lines hit hard~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

3 posted 2001-08-31 02:57 PM

Nice one James
Good see you here,
I remmeber your poetry fondly
now I know why.

Gloom

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

4 posted 2001-09-01 03:11 PM

Very Good!!!! Love it

Thank You
~~~Connie~~~

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