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Ginners
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since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

0 posted 2001-08-23 08:04 PM

As he holds her close,
She says 'you mean everything to me',
But he can't understand what everything means,
Even though he says it back she fills with emptiness,
Because she knows he will never understand,

As she starts to cry,
He says 'I'll love you forever',
But she can't believe in someone else's forever,
When she says it back he fills with hopelessness,
Because he knows she will never believe,

"I'll build a wall if we can keep them on the other side"-NIN
"There is no always forever"-The Cure
"Even the losers get lucky some times"-Tom Petty

Ian Llewellyn ap-Griffith
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since 2000-02-12

Posts 197
Cincinnati, Oh, U.S.A.

1 posted 2001-08-24 02:47 AM

Aargh! Take thy beak from out my heart! This was wrenching.
Futility and hopelessness are my favorite themes in poetry (and film and literature, etc...). You describe them in essence.
Ian

Sing while you may
-The Prophet Qa'sepel

Your pain is for you alone, As it is, As it was, As it will be forever, Amen
-The Prophet Qa'sepel

Wikket
Member

since 2000-01-29

Posts 340
Santa Clara, CA USA

2 posted 2001-08-24 03:45 PM

Awwwwww...this is deeply emotional. Almost made me cry a little bit. I know how you feel...it's a terrible thing I do to myself though. I'm glad you could let all this emotion out in so few words. ~~Jamie

"There are no unlockable doors
There are no one winning the wars
There are no unrightable wrongs or unsinkable songs..." --Ozzy

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 2001-08-24 04:18 PM

You took this right from my heart...wonderful how you expressed these feelings...James

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

4 posted 2001-08-24 07:39 PM

So sad when anyone is to frightened to take a gamble in the love/stakes compartment. This moved my soul... but then the rational side of me says - "Is there really a forever?"
Sorry LOL must be my mood today...
Isis

*The greatest warrior is one that does not need to fight* ~Isis~

Apachecat906
Member

since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA

5 posted 2001-09-04 04:30 PM

Hi...I really enjoyed your poem. Why can't we believe what other people say even when we really want to and even when they mean it? Its so sad...thanks for putting my feelings into words.

allis4angel
Member

since 2001-04-10

Posts 82
Portugal

6 posted 2001-09-06 04:17 PM

everything, never, forever...

Very nice poem around these three words I'm so afraid to hear/say!

Congratulations.

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

7 posted 2001-09-06 06:38 PM

Beautiful... tragic.... Well done
~Connie~

Ginners
Member

since 2000-07-22

Posts 339
Mullica Hill, New Jersey

8 posted 2001-09-06 06:48 PM

Thanks guys you are always so nice to me

Rosebud1229
Senior Member

since 2000-04-05

Posts 1813
North Carolina

9 posted 2001-09-06 11:15 PM

Ginners, awesome, can really relate to this, sometimes forever is not as far as we would imagine, trust is something gained.

anonymousfemale
Member Elite

since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

10 posted 2001-09-07 03:20 PM

Oh wow...how sad. It's a reality though and that's why it'll hit so many people hard.
I did enjoy it though very much and I'm glad that I came across it.

Thanks for posting this and keep writing.

~AF~

"Kelly's my Hero!" "No, Kelly's your heroine." "Kelly has heroin??" "What?"

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