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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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The Eyes. As I gaze into your eyes I see a love that’s true As I peer into your eyes I find your heart is blue As I wander in your eyes I gain a hidden beauty As I look into your eyes loving you is my duty As I float amidst your eyes I feel I must confess As I walk amongst your eyes I find no wilderness As I sail upon your eyes I find a raging sea As I dive into you eyes I see your love for me As I delve deep into your eyes I wonder what i’ll find but I needn’t look in to your eyes to see that you are blind. Happy Birthday Gemma. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh that is just such a wonderful piece!! Oh wow! I don't know what to say! I hope this one stays on here for a long time, but it's going into my library!!! I'm SOOO gonna remember this for a long long time! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
WOW! This was WONDERFUL i absolutly love how you used different verbs for the repetition lines..great great great job. i dont know why more people havent read this...but its great and thats all that matters  Keep it up!¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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~sugarpie313~ Member
since 2000-09-14
Posts 375Maine, USA |
wow... when i read this i think of an ex of somesort that your telling that they couldn't see something good that was right in front of their face. (i.e. you) get what i mean? well wow... this is sooo good. LIBRARY!! hehee nice job ~Valerie~ *Life can take your dreams and turn them upside down, Friends will talk about you when you're not around, but don't ever lose that light in your eyes* |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NIcely done here. I liked it, and especially the way it ended. Last line was nice.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i like the repeating lines you did a good job thanks for the read keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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