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jytree
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since 2000-01-26

Posts 336
omaha ark usa

0 posted 2001-03-08 09:31 PM

I have walked down this life before,
And with everyday a new hurt that I bore,
I cant change it this is just life,

See her tears stream down her face,
I make a vow and bury it in place,
No more hurt no more pain,
Because as much as things change they remain the same,

Sitting alone with in this darken hour,
Saying goodbye to my soul as it was devored,

Many days that I look to that,
When I hardened my heart and turned my back.

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel

DancinQueen

Senior Member

since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

1 posted 2001-03-08 11:33 PM

whoa~ powerful poem. great job..and everytime I see your name, i think Justin Timberlake..lol i dont know why but I thought I'd share

*dq

¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤

Shygirl82
Member

since 2001-02-19

Posts 245
Ilinois

2 posted 2001-03-09 12:47 PM

wow..great poem...it really hit me...keep up the good work..i look forward to reading more
:-)
~Nikki~

Allan Riverwood

Member Elite

since 2001-01-04

Posts 3502
Winnipeg

3 posted 2001-03-09 10:05 AM

Great work as per usual, Jay. The last line was marvelous. "I hardened my heart and turned my back." Very nicely worded.
You rule.

~Allan

If I had your eyes, I'd be blind. For I can only see out of my own. ~~Carly Van Dort

Tears of Glass
Member

since 2000-12-04

Posts 182
Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure

4 posted 2001-03-09 10:42 AM

Wow... very good poem. It's very powerful. Job VERY well done. *click* into my library. Nicely done.

*Jennifer

"My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see."

TearsOfPearls
Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 322
Vereeniging, South-Africa

5 posted 2001-03-09 02:01 PM

...then you toss them together and wala (excuse that word)a perfect poem...very powerful...keep up the good writing...

Planning big can be a gamble...I have already rolled the dice!

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

6 posted 2001-03-09 05:52 PM

I thought you did quite well. Not as good as the previous poem, but still a wonderful job.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

jytree
Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 336
omaha ark usa

7 posted 2001-03-09 07:26 PM

I am glad that poems bring out stress and it really helps to know that you like them

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel

Greeneyes617
Member

since 2000-11-22

Posts 329
Arkansas

8 posted 2001-03-09 09:54 PM

Awesome poem.

Angel in Flight
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since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

9 posted 2001-03-10 02:13 PM

I love how you write.. All of your poems are so powerful and filled with so much meaning almost making the reader overflow with your thoughts... and somehow within it all the words start to entwine themselves within your soul until.... they leave their mark within you and you can never forget them.

The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny

Angel in Flight
Member

since 2001-01-07

Posts 381

10 posted 2001-03-10 02:14 PM

Oh my goodness.. I forgot to add this to my library!!! Here we go....

The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny

jytree
Member

since 2000-01-26

Posts 336
omaha ark usa

11 posted 2001-03-10 09:09 PM

hey angel I think I am going to start crying because the is probually the best and sweetiest thing that anyone has said to me in along time,
You are right I try to place my whole being in my poems and of course sometimes it just flows like being on angel's wings,
and then I can stubb my toe from time to time. I am gald that everyone enjoys my work but I just give the glory to God because he created this world My heart and my expersinse
of averthing from walking until now and every day foward.

Lead me not into temptation,
I can find the way there mysel

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

12 posted 2001-03-11 10:14 PM

very strong emotions my friend
i hope things are better now for ya
I don't blame everyone else for liking this
It's a really good write
thanks for sharing

"So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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