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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
First off, I wanna thank Rachael for helping me w/ the title. This is my first post. I hope you like it! Nobody knows who I am Few understand my pain Trust is something I cant seem to find A perfect life is something I dont find real Knowing that the truth Will never be known Living a lie, in a sense Without lying, just leaving the past alone Should I keep it bottled up inside I know no one could handle it I dont even want to think about my life But Ive learned I have to deal with it My life isnt what I wanted But I guess nobodys can be To hate myself my world To forget what its like to be me I hate living in lies and fake smiles In crowds of people pretending to care And I try not to cry, for the last thing I need Is for fake people to say "Ill be there" [This message has been edited by acire (edited 03-12-2001).] |
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Rodney Belcher Member
since 2000-06-06
Posts 227Taylor, Michigan |
we all struggle with those "demons" inside...this is a good way to let it go...welcome and keep up the good work...Rod Love one another-let God do the worrying, Rodney |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! It's nice to see you've decided to join our family here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you enjoy you stay. Happy reading and posting. pls check your email as to the poem, you did really well you've expressed yourself cleary seems like other members would enjoy your posts keep sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Many excellent points made in this poem. "The last thing I need is for fake people to say 'I'll be there.'" This was magnificent. I can say I'll be here, not to help but to read your poetry.  Welcome to Passions. Hope you have fun sharing, reading, learning and teaching with the rest of us. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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shortilove_03 Junior Member
since 2001-02-15
Posts 20Arkansas, United States |
Hey, welcome to Passions! I really liked your poem. You expressed your feelings very well. We all feel like that sometimes. I'll be here for you. =-) |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS Great poem to start off here. Very sentimental poem. I liked it. Keep posting. *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Hey, I've been slow in reading lately and this is the first one I've read today! This is really very good! I'm not one for contructive critiques, so I'll just say don't let rules confine you (ahh poor poor Allan)! Anyway, welcome to another planet, keep posting! -Bryan "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Allysa 
since 1999-11-09
Posts 1952In an upside-down garden |
  WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!!!!! I really like this poem, it's excellent and it descibes how a LOT of poeple feel. Adding it to my 'brary.  I wish people would stop telling me that I can do anything I want to. I never thought that I couldn't. Life is what happens when you're making ot |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked it. I thought it was pretty true, who would want the people who don't care to say they do? It's quite illogical to act like you give if you really don't. Anyway, Welcome to Passions! I hope you enjoy your stay here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Welcome, welcome.Enjoy your time here! An exceptional first post. The last line really hit me hard. I look forward to more of your work. ~AF~ "To alcohol! The cause of - and solution to - all of life's problems!" Homer Simpson |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
WELCOME WELCOME WELCOME! Good poem..lots of sadness though. I think if i sat and really thought about my life and all the people in it I could probably come up with something like this. But my motto is...Don't get caught up in the cons of life because the pros outweigh them i dont know if that'll help but if you just think ab out all the good things, it'll keep your mind off everything going wrong..atleast for a little while NEWHO..great poem, keep posting!!*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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grey::tears Junior Member
since 2001-03-07
Posts 19lost within my mind |
hey, i kow what you are saying about not asking for this life. i could relate to that alot... AKS |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
All I'm gonna say is that all my poems are what I feel, and you have no clue who I am or what I am going through, so dont even go there. OK?? *Me* *If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything* *A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things* |
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WaitN4AnAngel Junior Member
since 2001-03-08
Posts 37I wish I knew where I was... |
All Im gonna say is that I did not right this poem to please anyone. OK?? *Me* *If you don't stand for something, you'll fall for anything* *A smile is a curve that straightens out a lot of things* |
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shadowmere Junior Member
since 2001-03-10
Posts 11Ohio, USA |
well now...it takes all kinds I suppose... Can it be so that you’ve been so ignorant or am I just another soul, in loves mad torrent? |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I have removed 2 replies which is definitely unacceptable here in PIP. We are here to only reply for motivation purposes or for helping to improve other poet's skills in writing(if Constructive Criticizm is encouraged by the writer). "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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