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Entrance to Love (Allan's Challenge)
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Entrance to Love (Allan's Challenge) |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair 
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NOTE: In response to Allan and my challege  /pip/Forum45/HTML/000961.html Sorry for all the posts.. and sonnets, please forgive me!‘Sonnet VIII – Entrance of Love’ Knock, knock, upon my precious dungeon door, An amplified voice instigates a thought. The hand attacks the twelfth hour once more, I arouse to see what this ruckus brought. A man in black velvet robes lifts above, Asking what I would do if faced abrupt. “For Chaos, Logic, Faith, Virtue or Love? And I am sorry If I’ve interrupt.” Love encircles life, it enlightens me. Rest assured that I’ll choose it over all! It fills my heart, like rivers to the sea, And also, it will never let me fall. So as I step on through my loving door, I leave the rest to rot upon my floor. Jeremy D Raulinaitis [This message has been edited by jeremydraul (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Excellent! Woo hoo! So the Sonnet king chooses Love above all! Very nice. I like how you summarized all the choices in one line. Gave a neat impact, and magnified the importance of your choice. Very well done, Jesper! ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-07-2001).] |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
This was spectacular. You really did a great job with this challenge. love, chaos, virtrue, faith, or logic??? I will get back to ya on that. Jason |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This was awesome jer! Question though: Who would pick chaos? Surely not any of us.....well maybe acire, but still!!!! anyway nicely done here jer!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Good job of conquering this challenge, it's a good sonnet And about your Critique message, Jeremy wears dirty diapers  "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." BothUnknown |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Don't mind me, I'd just like to tell Dopey chaos is my choice. "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." BothUnknown |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
How'd you guess my pick Dopes  JD, another wonderful post you're getting better and better by the hour I actually went back to your original posts I'll tell you what.... You've definitely grown in writing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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HiddenSparklez Member
since 2000-12-29
Posts 190British Columbia, Canada |
Totally amazing comes to my mind when describing this poem. One of the most interesting sonnets I've ever read. You seem to know how to write perfectly in a poem, which is a rareity.  "You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
WOW!!! This was magnificently done, Jeremy. I am still in awe from the read.... wonderful job once again. |
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