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My Wish To The Heavens
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My Wish To The Heavens |
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xShUgArHiGhx 
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
As i lay in my bed, Then slowly open my eyes. A pale cream colored figure appeared, Much to my suprise. She reached out her hand, Without speaking a word. Her eyes sparkled with warmth, She finally has heard. She came to take me, Away from my pain. To a world of love, Not one drowning in rain. As i got up and got ready to go, I realized that it is I, Who like her, Started to glow. My wish was finally heard, I'm being taken away. No longer being tortured, By the upcoming days. I couldnt believe this was happening, My breath was taken away. My heart stopped beating, And all the pain and heartache, Went astray. As i smiled contently, The angel took her hand out of mine. Apologized with sorrow, And said it was a mistake, It wasnt my time. The life rushed back to me, "How could this be a mistake? You came to grant my wish, My life for you to take!" She vanished to the sky, Leaving me in dismay, I guess i'll just have to keep wishing, Until the angel gets my wish right one day. |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
its a shame that nobody replied earlier. this is one incredible piece. sugar youve been here a while and you know that when i reply i really mean it. this is wonderful in all the sense of the word. i loved the imagery and the overall tone that you express through it. incredible  i loved it. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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TopGunLauren Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 718California |
Your poem was so awsome and had a very deep message at least to me it did. I've wished many nights that I would just die in my sleep but if I had the option to die I don't think I could go through it. ANyway keep up the great work I can't wait to read more of your poems! Lauren |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very well written.....san said it all. Maginifique!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
awesome very very good.. loved it a lot ~JDR "Most people are other people. Their thoughts are someone else's opinions, their lives a mimicry, their passions a quotation." -Oscar Wilde |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Thank u all so much for your replies...i love this poem so much, it's prolly one of my favs from all that i've written here. Thanx for reading it everyone and i appreciate the replies! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
Really great poem! I can really relate to wanting to just be done here and go somewhere where you aren't gonna deal with pain and suffering. But, then I realize that this world sucks and go on with my life. Great poem. Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Hey there. I completely fell in love with this poem...if its possible to fall in love with a poem...anyways, I truly enjoyed it. Thank you for posting. ~Carly inspiration of my art search for light out of the dark all the pictures in my heart lie awake there in my fog... |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Child of the stars, we could begin some kind of love triangle over this poem. I'm also in love with it! ^_^ GREAT poem! Seriously. The idea behind it is depressing, but that's great poetry for you. If you are afraid that your wish won't come true, then I recommend you learn to love your current environment. If I get my wish, you aren't going anywhere! ~_^ -Allan Eternal life without the darkness isn't life at all- it is a lobotomy. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like this one a lot, it's very well done. I'm glad to see you like it too "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
i hvae one thing to say Angels walk this earth too you know. All you have to do is open you eyes and one day you'll find one or one will find you. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Im so happy that all of u liked this poem!!! Thank u so much for readin!! |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
i really liked this. I agree with Acire that angels live on earth to. great, actually amazing poem regina |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
AAHHH!! Sorry i missed this one babe! LOL Newho...after our long discussion about u know who, lol ok 15mins, but neways...i decided to go count (im not done countting yet LOL LOL) but i saw this and i dont know how i missed it! I'm so sorry. I'm w/ Lauren..this does have a really deep meaning for me as well. And i was just thinking..Lauren's from the westcoast, im from the midwest, and you're from the eastcoast. how odd lol ok wheww im gonna go now talk to you later chic***dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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anonymous albert ?
since 2001-03-23
Posts 2979 |
wow!...amazing poem...the flow was great the meaning behind this poem and how you wrote it was perfect!...i loved this piece greatly...awesome job here Michele! ...bye  i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you? |
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