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Brandon New Member
since 2001-03-04
Posts 5Pennsylvania |
i've never written a poem before until early this morning when i couldn't sleep. i know that i'm in love with my best friend's girlfriend. he does nothing but make her cry and i do nothing but make her happy. she has told me this time and time again. last night it just really got to me and i ended up writing my first poem ever. here it is. i wore my heart on my sleeve. it held on tight when it was in need. it went away to my best friend. a love i know will never end. now here i lay without that heart. the only one left is torn apart. tell me what you think of this. -brandon [This message has been edited by Brandon (edited 03-04-2001).] |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Let me be the first to christin your poem!! =) Wait did I spell that right? anyways I'm no good with spelling atm:P but I love your poem, honestly I do, I look forward to reading more, wonderful how you put your feelings out in this poem, maybe someday you can share it with her, she'd love it trust me  but I know it's tough..well I should go before I ramble on!! Keep them coming Tmd, Kristen "Let me be the one you call, if you jump I'll break your fall, lift you up and fly away with you into the night" ~Crash and Burn~ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Hey, this is your first poem, you say? So you joined Passions in Poetry after writing your very first... that is truly fascinating. I can't wait to see the product of a poet reared here from infancy.  This piece was well done... I can see it was your first, but I by no means say that in a bad way. It just gives you a lot of room to work on, I assume you have much to learn, and learn you shall in the arms of the good people here. Welcome to Passions. And welcome to the concept of poetry. I can't wait to see more from you. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Welcome to Passions! I surely hope you decide to stay here for a long time so we may be able to see you grow within the art of poetry. I thought that this was great for your first poem. God knows that my first poem was nowhere as good as yours. You have some beautiful thoughts here, quite sad though. The situation is a toughy. Good luck with it! Oh and dude, help me out here.....I promise a pal of mine to help him with his forum. You gotta go check out Teen Explorer.....ask for Walt, he's got cake!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily [This message has been edited by Dopey_Dope (edited 03-04-2001).] |
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Isabel Galaxia Senior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 733 |
Hey this is great, especially for a first. Okay well Welcome to Passions, hope you like it here. Now, the situtation...obviously very tough. Good luck with it...if you need to talk I'm here Smile, keep these up Bel "And you're my obsession I love you to the bones And Ana wrecks your life Like an anorexia life" - "Ana's Song", Silverchair |
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Brandon New Member
since 2001-03-04
Posts 5Pennsylvania |
thank you for responding to my first poem. last evening when i was torn i didn't know what to do. as i was searching for something i came across netpoets.com and that led me to try and write a poem. writing that short poem helped me more than i ever though it would. i've never been a reader or a writer of any sorts but i like this. thanks -Brandon |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!!! It's good to see that you've decided to join our family of poets here in Passions for Poetry. Hope you do enjoy as we all do. Please check you email Your poem is obviously straight from the heart. Can't wait to see more of your future work. Don't worry about your situation right now, things will get in place. thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
this was a good poem, keep writing. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh this is actually very good, particularly for a first poem! I look forward to reading more, I hope I get the chance. "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
 Welcome to Passions Good job on this first post! Your poem is good, I hope you stay here and show us more poems that we'll force you to write "Be kind, for everyone you meet is fighting a hard battle" "Life's short. If you don't look around once in a while you might miss it." BothUnknown |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
for a first poem this was amazing. The sistuation your in isnt great, but i think all will work out. Welcome to passions!your work is going to be very well liked here. Regina |
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Tears of Glass Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 182Physically? VA.... Mentally? I'm not quite sure |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS Beautiful first poem! Thanks for the great read.. and keep em coming.. I'm going to like you  *Jennifer "My nightmare isn't fearing what I dream... It's waking up, knowing what I'll see." |
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Kicking Kim Member
since 2001-04-16
Posts 426Cloud Cucko Land! |
Hey Brandon, I'm a new member too and I thought that your poem was very good, it means a lot because there is true meaning behind it all. Good luck with getting the girl, I know its tough but I'm sure she'd open her heart to you if you read this poem to her. Truly Appreciative ^*~Kicking Kim~*^ |
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katherine Member
since 2000-06-10
Posts 365Canberra Australia |
this is really great! hey she'll come to her sensers! just you wait, thats all you can really do. keep it up ~kate 'Love starts with a smile, grows with a kiss, and ends with a tear.' |
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Marshalzu 
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
Hey Brandon, Welcome to Passions !!! a great first poem nevermind a first post!!! Well I hope you enjoy your time here and I look forward to more of your work... I would not worry about your bestfriends girlfriend... I was in a similar situatuion and I ended going out with her... anyway hope your poetry pulls you through Dopey why on earth would their be cake in Teen explorer? <<<_Andrew_>>> " No Army can conquer a galaxy, yet faith alone can overturn the universe." |
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Heavens Tears
since 2001-03-15
Posts 677 |
Great job! Welcome to Passions! *If the only place I can live my dreams is in my sleep, then I'll sleep forever!* |
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Linc
since 2001-03-07
Posts 552The Backstreet Boy |
Hey, Welcome to Passions! I posted my first poem here to I had never written a poem in my life until my friend got me started here reading her work and others. I hope you stay here and write more I am looking forward to seeing more of your work. Until your next poem -- Linc "Once you reach your original goal it seems that the journey was your real accomplishment." |
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banburycross Senior Member
since 2001-03-27
Posts 946viginia |
Welcome to passions!! wow, this is incredible for it being the first poem you've ever written, you expressed your emotions really well. writing always helps in situations like this, and it looks like you have a lot of potential so i really hope you keep at it. welcome again, i look forward to reading more of your work. Sometimes, the things that go unsaid are the only things worth hearing. |
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Hand Me Down Junior Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 32WV |
Dude, this poem is deep, I really liked it. Let me tell you, right now I am in a similar situation, strange huh. Hope to see more! "Cause I can't fix something this complex anymore than I can build a rose" |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
WELCOME!This was a really terrific first poem...You really got the situation and your thoughts on paprt (screen, whateva) very well...Poetry's nice eh? Welcome to Passions, welcome to poetry. I hope you fall in love with both. ~Carly There are pleasures in poetic pains that only poets know......~Unknown |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Oh did I say there was cake? I LIED! Well....you can still go to the explorer and look around. You're bound to find Jenn Cerricone's kissing booth |
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lonely*soul Member
since 2001-04-05
Posts 396east haddam (moodus) ct :) |
ok well this was short simple and still leaves ya asking what happened (or maybe my mind is just stuck in soap opera mode) neways i truley do like this one!! great first job..hope to see more of your work and oh yeah... welcome to passions " im surrounded by people, but yet im still all alone" |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
Hey!!! And welcome to Passions!!!! For your first poem ever written i have to say you picked this up rather naturally! Seems like your definately in a tough situation...i hope that things work out in the end tho. Maybe you should be with her if you friend only makes her cry. Please do keep us updated on this one!! LoL N e way im really glad that you decided to join us and keep on posting!! Your very talented and you didnt even know it!! I cant wait to see what else you have in store. |
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