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Misunderstanding. |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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At Scout Camp three days later. I feel dirty, I feel cheap, Like some hoare that you can't keep, I know pain and I feel hate, You don't know what I contemplate Look at me and see me cry Don't look away, don't you dare lie, Destroy my hopes, destroy my dreams Let me cope, let me scream Look at me, look at my face, Don't turn and run coz I won't chase, Look at me, look in my eyes, Listen to words in between my sighs, Talk to me, tell me the truth, Just your word, I don't need no proof, I want to know if you love me, I just want you and me to be. I. H.A.T.E. R.A.C.H.E.L. P.H.I.L.L.I.P.S I can't stand you, Hate flows through me, Aching heart blue Tears me free Everything is fine Right until I think, Along the line, Called the brink, Hate your name, Everything I hear, Love's no game, Passing cheer, Hate consuming, In my life, Life resuming, Long live Strife In my worries, Passing heart blue, Silent sorrys, won't make me love you I I think I've lost my appetite, My appetite for life, Tonight I don't wan't to fight, I've put down my fork and knife, Right now I need to hold you, Everything gonna be alright, Deep down I am black and blue, Because of you tonight, Everything is nothing, Cause I'm the only one All the world is nothing Understand that I am gone, Silence will not save you, Everybody knows, I am stuck in glue, My life is sent below, Destroy me with a joke, Even laugh at me, Always trying to poke, Decisions out of me. Knowing that you love me, I might get used to you, Loving set me free, Loving made me blue, Everyday I need more, Destroying my whole life Blue heart, I am a bore You don't need me in your life You don't need me to love you Or to hold your hand Underneath I feel blue and nothing feels quite grand. Three poems all expressing my deep hatred of my girlfriend... by the way it was all just a big misunderstanding and she didn't at scout camp and now I am so happy that I just thought that I would share my joy at being so happy but obviously the poems are just well awful... Marshal Zu. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
Wow~ powerful powerful emotions. My fav outa the 3 was the first one though. excellent..it flowed so nicely and everything just fit. cant wait to read more  *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
The last poem was huge, and I didn't even notice! That's the definition of wonderful flow, my friend. The size of each line and the rhyme made this piece absolutely wonderful. The acrostic was clever. Well done. And it's good to hear you are happy now. ~Allan Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan [This message has been edited by Allan Riverwood (edited 03-04-2001).] |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Wow powerful here.......very powerful. Especailly the line I hate rachel blala. Wowow......that was a shocker. Anyway nicely done here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
a lot of hatred and anger on these poems hope things get better for you just tell her how you feel and talk about it  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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