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Crash - Rengay Colaboration with Allan Riverwood
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Crash - Rengay Colaboration with Allan Riverwood |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Watching for any mistakes Waiting to strike from shadows i see you, typist innocently staring back at the monitor Dark host of the night I am death, I am windows! Strikes with shoddiness tap furiously clicking, clacking, poor keyboard control, alt, delete Another is down Doc lost to Microsoft's Mouth Thank Bill for dumb pranks! the answer presents itself just unplug the stupid thing! |
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keoni Senior Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 850Up in the mountains in the NFC |
I liked this poem. It has a really cool format. It was also quite funny. I enjoyed it Jon "Your anger is a gift"-Rage Against The Machine |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Skip all the fixey steps...go straight to the last line...and you have my way of solving probs..hehe...this was supergreat!! Me likes it much much. Good work kids. ~Carly "Nature is not only all that is visible to the eye--it also includes the inner pictures of the soul." ~Edvard Munch |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
eh... I truely didnt like it.  The topic isnt serious enough for me...oh well nice try guys JR When my life dims to a perish, it will become a quote in itself... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I didn't much like this one either, but it was a fun read. I would have expected something more serious from you two, but I am assuming that the both of you are tech freakz.....so that's cool. nice try  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Greeneyes617 Member
since 2000-11-22
Posts 329Arkansas |
LOL. Well that was cute. I liked it.  |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Well geez.  "Allan, should we post this?" "Sure, why the hell not?" Hehe... yeah. We'll do our impressive one later. Lighten up. Stupidity makes the world go around...and people like us laugh. ~~Elizabeth, to Allan |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Just as a response to Allan for a second before I get to the rest of you: Allan, do you always talk about stupid people with people on ICQ? It seems that your quotes seem so often to be about stupid people being tools or clowns or some other thing, lol. Mind you, I do enjoy reading those quotes though, because I often cannot stand stupid people, especially in school.... Everyone Else: LOL, it seems that this poem got some mixed reaction. However, I am glad to have collaborated with someone for the first time. It was my idea to write about computer crashes, so I am at fault if people don't like the subject matter. [Bad day yesterday, let's say, lol] Well, anyhow, I am glad that some liked this, and I am glad that others have given criticism. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
You guys did a good job... "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
Actually I think this was a great collaboration. I think the idea of collaborating is to get something different... unexpected. and this was certainly that. At the same time it was humorous. I don't see any fault in that. Thanks for this very enjoyable reason. I mean what would this world be like if we were serious all the time Jason |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thankyou all for the compliments. IsGonna: I'm glad you liked this. I guess teenaged life is often quite tempestuous. I am glad taht I am not a normal teenager. I seem to be reaching the end of my teenaged years without too much serious incident... "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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