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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
****I just wanted to thank everyone who gave me so much support on my first post..It really meant alot to me. I enjoy reading all of your work...***** They say that beauty is in the eye of the beholder-this simple sentence someone should have told her. She walked around with downcast eyes and a smile harldy ever replaced her frown. She fell in love with the boy who had big blue eyes, but he never knew that he was the cause of her sighs. She wished and prayed with all her might-that someday soon he would hold her tight. But she stayed silent not uttering a single word. Thoughts of "he'll never like you" she was soon assured. But this boy with the big blue eyes...took this girls hand and pulled her aside. He looked deep in her eyes and gently touched her face and said three little words that made this girl cry. What he said was simple but so sweet... He told her YOU ARE BEAUTIFUL It was these three words that she needed to hear and it was then she realized that love was nothing to fear. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
A good idea to title this poem Beautiful - it is indeed quite beautiful. You did a great job here. You should try to get this one published into the poetry archives at www.netpoets.com I believe you'll find a link to do so at the top of your post. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a wonderful piece! I wish that all situations like this ended this way. Thanks for sharing!  "Men judge generally more by the eye than by the hand, for everyone can see and few can feel."-Machiavelli |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh I love this poem! I absolutely LOVE IT! It describes like, the erfect situation for me! I really go fr the unpopular, basicaly, what you described for the girl in here. But of course my eyes are hazel... "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Very nicely written. I liked it.....the 3 words weren't what I expected and that obviously made a huge difference....it's good he didn't say I LOVE YOU cuz then it woulda been a regular, common poem....noooooo this was different. Very nicely written here.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Why does Dopey have to steal my thoughts all the time. I was gonna say something about the 3 little words too myself. I do belive that this is one of the best poems i've read today. thanks for sharing "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Shygirl82 Member
since 2001-02-19
Posts 245Ilinois |
Wow thanks everyone. I had a really crappy day but when I came home and checked my email..all of your thoughts made me smile:-) thanks so much. ~Nikki~ |
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Angelwings Member
since 1999-08-27
Posts 222IL, USA |
A truly touching poem. I, too, liked the 3 words spoken at the end. Thanks for posting this one. It's unlike one I've ever read. |
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xShUgArHiGhx
since 2000-09-26
Posts 3150tRyIn tO fIt iN2 mY oWn ShoEs |
This was an amazing poem!!! One of the best i ever read!!! Great job!!! |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
great job  I like poems with happy ending..keep up the great work*dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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