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Walking between Shadows |
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Angel in Flight Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 381 |
I used to walk between shadows. Afraid I’d see to far. Darkness started to me my friend, But my heart it did mar. I once had ran upon the nails. Loving all of the pain!! Searching for a rapid relief. Out of my dark filled day. I had cut through the forest trees . I made my own flesh bleed. My blood had suffocated me ... until I could not breath The darkness was my enemy. Cloaked in red, black, and white devouring my very soul, and leading me to night. The dust blew over my body, And the nails continued the pain. No longer was I remembered. I was left bleeding......... gasping for air...... dying ........... in the rain. The law of harvest is to reap more than you sow.Sow a habit and you reap a character.Sow a character and you reap a destiny |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
Amanda, this was an amazing poem. The power of the sadness was there. your poetry has become very powerful. its nice that way. Regina |
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anonymousfemale Member Elite
since 2000-02-02
Posts 2797Limbo |
Wow Amanda, this is amazing. So much emotion..its just incredible. Keep on writing like this. Like Regina said, it has become very powerful. ~AF~ "Love makes us poets and the approach of death should make us philosophers." ~ George Santayana |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Amanda -- you seem to grow more and more with your poetry everyday you have turned out to be an amazing poet your use of metaphors is also outstanding keep it up "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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DancinQueen
since 2000-07-29
Posts 1092Kokomo,IN,USA |
awesome poem~~ i just got this mental picture of nails and blood and bleck ...i didnt mean to make that sound bad!! i was just bein weird..but great poem. all yours hold so much depth and beauty, keep it up *dq ¤Sometimes the hardest thing to get over, is something you never really had¤ |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I thought the poem was pretty dark, but I liked it. Very nice read, the ending was exceptional!  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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