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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Floating beyond the reach of men, Soaring above those mortal coils, Seeing simple men at their toils, In dark skies of paper and pen I fly and soar, high through the mind and soul, While time and fools and folly take their tole. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh." -- Magus |
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Ina Senior Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 1236Quebec, Canada |
short....burt great.very intersting i liked it beaucoup. Regina |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
good way of portraying writing! very very deep and also interesting! JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
well put fractal.....Now, i can't wait for the next piece you decide to share  "So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Neither can I. Fractal, you have become perhaps the poet I look up to most in these forums. I learn something after every piece of yours I read. And this is no exception. Very well done, the shortness made the message clearer.  ~Allan Welcome to Planet Earth, where the angels tread on the land. ~~Allan, to Amanda. The sunshine hears you not. Speak to the shadows he creates. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Thankyou all for the compliments. This was, once again, another poem I've written while listening to music. Allan: I am glad that I have become that much of a mentor to you. I will try not to disappoint you, lol. Well, anyhow, glad you all liked it. "If history is to change, let it change. If the world is to be destroyed, so be it. If my fate is to die, I must simply laugh" -- Magus |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Excellent Fractal! The rhyme scheme and rhythm worked well in this piece, and I very much enjoyed the wording and sentiments ... really well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
Very pretty... I liked it.  jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I didn't think that this poem was up to the potencial that you have shown me in your other poems. I thought the general message was good, but I know you could have done better.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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