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Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

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0 posted 2001-02-22 05:12 PM

Tight Grip.

Release your grip on me
take your hand off my heart
you just cannot see
that I’m being torn apart
I gave you all my love
and i’ve got nothing left to take
I’ve been up high above
and i’ve seen all my mistakes
but all i’ve done is love you
and I feel so abused
and now i’m left black and blue
so I hope that your amused.

Err... yeh... that feels better...
Marshal zu...

Angelwings
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since 1999-08-27

Posts 222
IL, USA

1 posted 2001-02-22 05:17 PM

What a wonderful way to describe the pains of love! I enjoyed this poem greatly. I hope to read more of your work. Good luck in future writing.

cutie2005
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 148
Bennett, Colorado USA

2 posted 2001-02-22 06:59 PM

Glad you feel better hehe... That was an awomse poem, short and right to the point!! Good job!! And i really do hope that you are better!!!

Luv ya,
cutie

If you love someone you would go to the end of the world for them!

anonymousfemale
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 2797
Limbo

3 posted 2001-02-22 10:25 PM

Nice second post Marshal. I hope to see more of your writing up here soon.

~AF~

"Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment."
Buddha

Acies

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since 2000-06-07

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Twilight Zone

4 posted 2001-02-23 06:36 PM

It's nice to know that writing makes you feel better. I guess it's the same for most of us

thanks for the wonderful read and keep sharing

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-02-23 11:49 PM

I connected with this poem a lot. I have felt this way before too......as if the person hurting you does it for funs sake.
Nicely done here!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

Marshalzu

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since 2001-02-15

Posts 2681
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6 posted 2001-02-24 08:51 AM

Thanks for all the replies... I hope to bring you some more of my work soon... err... and as that old adage goes"a problem shared is a problem havled"... so as I see it I only need to send this to 10,000 people before the problem becomes insignificant... anyway thank you for sharing in my experience...
Marshal Zu

stace_co2003
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since 2001-03-30

Posts 497
In a dream world

7 posted 2001-05-27 04:58 PM

ok, I know I'm really really really really really late reading this, but I just wanted to tell you that you did a great job on this Zu.
look forward to speaking with you soon.
*s*
Stace

I'm just glad that now this rainstorm has ended, and I can see the rainbow once again.

anonymous albert ?

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since 2001-03-23

Posts 2979

8 posted 2001-05-27 06:24 PM

this was well written...quite powerful on this subject...great job and hope to see more Zu!

...?

i'm addicted to passions in poetry!...are you?

~sugarpie313~
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since 2000-09-14

Posts 375
Maine, USA

9 posted 2001-05-27 07:50 PM

ooh ooh i can soooooooooooo incredibly relate to this. don't you hate when the person u love doesn't like u that much back but you can't help but love them???!! it sucks... i think it's what they call unrequited love hahaha

absofreakinlutely love the poem tho!! GREAT JOB!!!!

Valerie

Why do you do what u do to me baby...you know if I could I'd do anything for you, please don't ignore me cause you know I adore you

cherish
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since 2001-03-25

Posts 1639
swimming in fairy floss...........

10 posted 2001-05-27 07:54 PM

ahhhhhhhhhhhhh!!!......and you think that you DONT write well?????....*pfffft!!*...this is a great poem...you described your feelings extremely well andrew...keep posting!!!...MORE says i !!

"Life is not long and boring,
it's short and compelling." -Javier Agosto-

HeAvEnS AnGeL
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since 2001-05-17

Posts 168
The Hot Girl From Canada

11 posted 2001-05-27 08:03 PM

Wow you really got all your emotions out that you probably wanted to. Great poem keep writing and don't forget to smile

Don't judge a person untill you have walked a mile in their shoes, this way your a mile away from them, and you have their shoes.

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