Teen Poetry #4 |
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You and I as though two ions |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA ![]() |
You and I as though two ions Pull each other closer with Feelings unexplained by science Measured not in height or width, Not in seconds, not in liters Not in kilograms or grams Not in meters—millimeters, But in warmth of loving arms. When my eyes begin to glisten When I’m moving in unrest Hold your breath and listen, listen To the heartbeat in my chest,-- Hear it slowly growing rapid? That’s because, when you are near Anything, my love, may happened Anything may happen, dear... Check out my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master |
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I liked this a lot.......DANMIT WHY CAN'T I WRITE LIKE THIS?!?!?! Great poetry!! ![]() I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Very nice rhythm and rhyme scheme Master ... great sentiments, nice work! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Now that is reallyBEAUTIFUL this is what i mean when i meant that it doesn't have to be too deep to be a great write So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. [This message has been edited by acire (edited 02-21-2001).] |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Master = best poet here 'Nuf said JR When life dims to a perish, my life will become a quote in itself... |
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