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Dark Enchantress
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since 1999-07-27

Posts 1258
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0 posted 2001-02-18 08:01 PM

Burning roots of spite and sin
Weaves throughout my hallowed skin
Remembering pictures of time passed
All too slow in a world too fast
Searching the depths of my mind
and still so much I cannot find

and in the end
we still pretend
the time we spend
not knowing when
we're finally free
and you could be
-NIN "The Wretched"

Angel of Darkness

[This message has been edited by Dark Enchantress (edited 02-18-2001).]

Child of the Stars

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since 2000-09-07

Posts 1658
Ann Arbor, MI

1 posted 2001-02-18 09:21 PM

Hey this was great. I loved the title. Makes so much sense. It really does. And, it fits the poem well. Wonderful creativity, wonderful write.
~Carly

"Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron)

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

2 posted 2001-02-19 12:17 PM

Nicely done here WOWOWOW......i really liked this one. Short and sweet, my kinda poetry!!

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

HiddenSparklez
Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 190
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2001-02-19 02:04 AM

I gotta agree... the title is the BEST ever... LOL but i guess that doesn't count right? The poem is what counts.. and it's great for a short and simple one.

"You do what you do, you say what you say, you try to be everything to everyone... come on now, do that stupid dance for me" -Everclear

fractal007
Senior Member

since 2000-06-01

Posts 1958

4 posted 2001-02-19 02:58 AM

Dark Enchantress:

I liked this one a lot. I didn't quite follow your use of the hallowed in the second line, but then realized that you were implying the destruction of innocence - the dessicration of something holy.

I really like the sense of both pain and numbness that this poem conveys. Great job here.

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

5 posted 2001-02-19 05:33 AM

Wonderful rhythm and flow Dark Enchantress ... very nicely done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

6 posted 2001-02-19 03:02 PM

I am totally amazed right now
wow wow wow
very beautiful expression of one's self
thanks for sharing this

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

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