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just once is all i ask
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just once is all i ask |
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sinfully_seductive Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 31 |
touch me once is all i ask make my skin grow ever numb kiss me once the sweet taste of your lips make my body burn with soul perceive me once as never done before i'm a naive heart wiht unspeakable wants forgive me once let not my radical feelings satisfaction denied hold me once in your warm embrace make my desires yearn with hunger trust me once i promise that containing worries your heart won't challenge me once with experiences not ever lain upon my innocent eyes believe in me once i'll show you how to live your life with all cautions in the wind hypnotize me once make my world an unbelievable dream from which i can't awaken dream with me once see how imaginable our lives could be with sheer flawlessness comfort me once when i feel lost and can't find my way i know you'll be there shelter me once keep me safe from this ironice, unjust society stay with me once i promise your side i'll never leave until you tell me so love me once is all i want make my heart hurt no longer |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Greetings. I don't believe I've read any of your work before this piece. It's a nice poem. I like the theme, the "~verb~ me once" thing really made you seem desperate and lonely. Made me feel your words a lot more. Best of luck with this situation. -Allan When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda |
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sinfully_seductive Junior Member
since 2000-11-13
Posts 31 |
i've posted in other forums, but just a couple times. in this poem, i'm not lonely, just wanting. thanx for the best of luck thing, i definitely need it for this situation. |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I like the repetitive style of this, good job on the poem! "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.therainforestsite.com |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Beautiful read such longing for someone i too love the repetetive style thanks for sharing So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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Elvenblood Member
since 2001-02-17
Posts 409Maine, USA |
Oh I love it!! lol, I'm also hyper, so please forgive me if I do something dumb!! but I really love this poem! "Some men see things as they are and say why. I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well hey, welcome back old member. I thought this was nice. I'd like to see you post on a regular basis, could it be done?  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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