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Teen Poetry #4

It's been raining all day...

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2001-02-16 10:44 PM

It’s been raining all day. The streets are flooded.
According to Darwin, I’ll soon grow fins,
becoming cold-blooded.
Then I’ll explore all the ins
and outs,
of Venice, buried below the reflected clouds.

As for now, I sit in a coffee shop, whose ceiling
is designed to resemble the sky.
The moon, like a fishing hook, seems appealing,--
it catches the eye....
it catches me by the eye.

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jeremydraul
Senior Member

since 2000-08-01

Posts 1118
State of Despair

1 posted 2001-02-16 11:27 PM

awesome, i definately enjoyed this one, keep writing this good stuff

Jeremy

Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark.

Acies

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Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-07

Posts 7665
Twilight Zone

2 posted 2001-02-17 01:20 PM

"According to Darwin, I’ll soon grow fins: i like this line for some reason

what about gils?
great read master
thanks for the share

So long as men can breathe or eyes can see,
So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S.

Jenn Cirrincione

Member Elite

since 2000-07-02

Posts 2107
Fl

3 posted 2001-02-17 03:08 PM

Hmmm, this was unusual. But I could really picture just sitting in some coffee shop, contemplating life...

Nice job!!

xoxo
Jenn

"I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia

Elvenblood
Member

since 2001-02-17

Posts 409
Maine, USA

4 posted 2001-02-18 10:44 AM

Hey, I love it! There's such talent here on this site, I feel dwarfed. I love this! Graphic, graphic is good.

"Some men see things as they are and say why.
I dream things that never were and say why not." ~RFK

Dopey Dope

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Member Patricius

since 2000-08-30

Posts 11132
San Juan, Puerto Rico

5 posted 2001-02-18 11:43 PM

I like this one. A very good perspective on things. Yet another wonderful poem.

I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust.

I'm in love with my shadow
I admire it daily

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