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Changing Skin
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Changing Skin |
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anomaly187 Member
since 2000-06-15
Posts 284San Francisco,CA,US |
When i meet you in another dream you can strip yourself and close your eyes to find some other way to see me to taste me and to feel me i will bring it down in all the minds of passerby's i change my skin and change my form what you will see is dead but here i hide my face to hide my fear my mouth is sewed with piercing words don't talk or shout or stare at me i will come back and take revenge and burn you all until your ends the armor here protects my skin and doesn't let the insects in picking and peeling and eating away i can feel it coming(inside me) i can feel it's mouth and i can feel it intimately while it is raping me Don't wait to see if i am broken as i blend into the background desperately seeking what can't be found i cannot hide but my mouth is forced open so that i can speak and act.. as i am lying you can take me for a ride i haven't posted in a couple of weeks because i have hit some serious writers block..and even this is not that good "When the going gets weird, the weird turn pro" |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
To be honest, I enjoyed it. And advice for writer's block? I'm going to say it again! ~FORMATS~ Use them! Try new ones! This wasn't too bad, you know. Quite descriptive. Best of luck overcoming your problems. When the sun dies, and the earth is thrown off its axis, the two of us will still, at that moment, be thinking of one another. ~~Allan, to Amanda |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
I thought this poem was very interesting. I kept picturing a person with there mouth sewn shut. Nice work. and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Well anomaly....allan said formats...bla....dif people do it dif ways.....but regardless of that, this IS a different format and style from your usual. Very well done on this piece.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
Well I've never read any of your other poems, but I'm going to start.  This one was great. It had my interest from the very beginning to the very end. Lovin' it.  and in the end we still pretend the time we spend not knowing when we're finally free and you could be -NIN "The Wretched" Angel of Darkness |
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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI |
Allo there. Once again, your poetry takes me to the rotten corners of the mind...enchanting me with words and phrases...Nice to read ya again, anomaly. ~Carly "Insane people are always sure that they are fine. It is only the sane people who are willing to admit that they are crazy." (Nora Ephron) |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I hate following Carly's replies How can I even come close to the things she says  anyways, i enjoyed reading the poem keep sharing So long as men can breathe or eyes can see, So long lives this, and this give life to thee." W.S. |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
kinda of an animal action in this poem, it was very grotesque, but i love that stuff, especially: "i will come back and take revenge and burn you all until your ends" nice job dude, keep posting Jeremy Life is fading me away, far away, but I’m sketching myself back, line by line, mark by mark. |
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