Teen Poetry #4 |
those woh teased |
eternal_darkone Junior Member
since 2001-02-07
Posts 14 |
Those who teased And tortured me for fun Had eaten away At my heart As it diminished It was replaced by hate As it was destroyed So was my life And my ability to care Now that it is gone I can never get it back I have tried and tried But with no sucess Because of those Who teased me My childhood is gone What was there I have erased In an attempt To ease the pain |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Wow... another good one here. Don't we just hate these people? ^_^ Great work. And keep to what you have learned. Your own habits are often the best. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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LucidityNow Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 118Canada |
This one is my favorite out of all of your poems. I used to be the one who teased people...I feel bad for it now. Let me tell you that kids dont really mean what they say, and you should try not to take it seriously, although hard to do. Great writing anyway. and i'm certain that if i drive into those trees, it would make less of a mess, than she's made of me... |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
wow tough situation, keep in there and post more of these nice poems JeremY |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
Your a good writer and there's no doubt about that. You have expressed your feelings really well in each poem of yours that i've read. It bothers me to see someone in so much pain and who carries so much hatred. Hope things do get better for you. I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Nice job on this poem, it's expressed really well in my opinion. "Disagreements stimulate thought, thought stimulates action, and action stimulates life." --Lakewalker http://www.thehungersite.com |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
NIcely done here. I know what you mean when you talk about NOT CARING. I'm going through my own little thing with that now. I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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