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Child of the Stars
since 2000-09-07
Posts 1658Ann Arbor, MI 
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I know this one isn't well written. I know its stupid. But frankly...I don't care. Note the massive amounts of sarcasm. Enjoy. Hello World, how are you? I hope you're feeling swell. Cut the crap, Child. See the truth. Your lies are looking Mighty tasty, this lovely afternoon. Care if I munch? I love you, Baby. Oh, thank you world! Ouch! I fear I'm becoming addicted. Let me feed you my fire, Baby. Bathe in my filth. Why, World, do you gaze at me so? I am afraid. The lust pains me so. They hold your precious Innocence, Baby. Oh World, don't... Hah. Another day, another joy murdered. |
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IsGona Senior Member
since 2000-07-14
Posts 723 |
I love the way you wrote this poem Very interesting Carly. You speak the truth here. The world is cruel sometimes. I hope all is well or at least gets better soon ~Jason To steal ideas from one person is plagiarism; to steal from many is research The early bird may get the worm, but the second mouse gets the cheese |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Whoa... this poem had me saying "oooh, burn" all the way through. I suppose that the world CAN be a smartass. I never saw it that way before. Great job, Carly! I ~love~ sarcastic poetry. There isn't enough of it around today. Hehe... great job again! This is our world, the sarcastic ass. -Allan We used to hate people, now we just make fun of them. It's more effective that way. --KMFDM |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
WOW, what a magnificant form and style! Brilliant!!! JeremY "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
This style reminded me of red riding hood and the wolf........."come closer child"....."why grandma"...."to see you better".... Yea......I liked this one. Nice carly.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Morouxshi San Member
since 2000-10-11
Posts 207San Juan, Puerto Rico |
what? i dont get what you encourage carly. i dont know its been a while. i loved the poem carly, sorry it took so long. San, the wise San, the dumb San, the guy... |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
life is hard, and that is a fact stay strong and don't give up hope you start feeling better Carly I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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orange()alligator Junior Member
since 2001-02-06
Posts 21 |
~carly~ hey, i'm not very good at WRITING poetry but i know a good poem when i read one. this one was great, sort of sad though. keep writin! =bergundy= |
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Jenn Cirrincione
since 2000-07-02
Posts 2107Fl |
I won't thrash this. Not at all. Frankly, I love the sarcastic tone, the world deserves it. It's always lashing out at us, right? hehehe No, seriously, I liked this.  xoxo Jenn "I'm a big, big, girl, in a big, big world, it's not a big, big thing if you leave me, but I do feel, that I will miss you much..." Emilia |
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