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MidnightMaverick Junior Member
since 2001-01-15
Posts 35Duluth, MN, USA |
Alone But not quite alone In Love But not quite in Love Without You But not quite without you Do you see me I can't quite see you Hold me close I can't quite hold you Kiss me gently Our lips can't quite kiss I love I can't quite love You Not quite Me Are you the one I can't quite be the One Alone Alone but surely not quite unloved |
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Angel Bee Member
since 2001-01-30
Posts 176Virginia |
Nice poem. keep writing  |
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Allan Riverwood
since 2001-01-04
Posts 3502Winnipeg |
Great job on this. I loved the format, absolutely and unconditionally. Displays a lot of confusion. Would you really want everything that you thrive for, if you could never appreciate it? |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
Great job on this one. I thought the format was fine....the ending was great. I liked it. I thought that all in all it was a powerful poem.  I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust. I'm in love with my shadow I admire it daily |
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Acies
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-07
Posts 7665Twilight Zone |
I like the way you kinda contradicted your thoughts.....I thought that was so unique and it actually made the poem what it is. And that's beautiful Thanks for the share I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR |
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